广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Try to form a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was about domestic affection. It showed the strong bonds between family members, which helped me understand the importance of family relationships. I found it very touching and memorable because it portrayed real emotions.

建议: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Make sure to answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete thoughts to improve clarity.

示例: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and subways. Although some are noisy, others are simple yet memorable. For example, some ads effectively convey important messages that catch my attention during my commute.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and provide specific reasons with linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: No, I don't like advertisements because they are often noisy, especially during my commute on the subway. Additionally, when I watch TV, some ads can be quite disturbing and interrupt the programme.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and clearer sentence structures. Add linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples to enrich your response.

示例: I like advertisements that focus on education and domestic affection because they teach valuable lessons. For instance, some ads promote kindness within families, which I find very inspiring and positive.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains several grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details.

示例: No, I don't often see advertisements on my phone or computer because I usually skip them. Also, I don't watch many movies or TV programmes online, so I rarely encounter ads during my internet use.

× Yes, one was the child I watched a lot of advertisements on TV which impressed me the most is advertisement that about domestic affection and after watching this advertisement I understand the relationship between family members and.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I watched a lot of advertisements on TV. The one that impressed me the most was an advertisement about domestic affection. After watching this advertisement, I understood the relationship between family members.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks clear structure, making it difficult to understand. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and coherence. Also, tense consistency is maintained by using past tense 'understood' to match the past context.

× Yes, I see a lot of noise in advertisements on the trains and subways and sometimes there are very simple, but it can let you remember a lot and it will account for many necessary message to you, so I I don't think.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on the trains and subways. Sometimes they are very simple, but they can help you remember a lot and convey many necessary messages to you, so I don't think...

The phrase 'noise in advertisements' is incorrect; it should be 'advertisements'. Also, 'account for many necessary message' is incorrect; 'convey many necessary messages' is appropriate. The sentence is also fragmented and needs restructuring for clarity.

× No, I don't like advertisement. I think there are so noisy why during my commute on subway or other transportations and sometimes I will watch it on the TV that can very disturbing me.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements. I think they are so noisy during my commute on the subway or other transportation, and sometimes I watch them on TV, which can be very disturbing to me.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. 'Transportations' is incorrect; 'transportation' is uncountable. Also, pronouns and verb forms are corrected for agreement and clarity.

× I like those advertisements that contain education and domestic affection because I think those advertisements can teach a lot of things to someone and can spread some good things.

✓ I like those advertisements that contain educational content and domestic affection because I think they can teach many things to people and spread positive messages.

The pronoun 'those advertisements' is repeated unnecessarily; replacing the second with 'they' improves flow. 'Education' should be 'educational content' to function as an adjective. 'Someone' is vague; 'people' is more appropriate here.

× No, I actually I will forward them and I don't have much advertisement to watch because I usually don't watch the movies or other TV programs. I I will just screaming on the Internet. So I I wouldn't see many advertisements on my on my phone.

✓ No, actually I usually skip them and don't have many advertisements to watch because I usually don't watch movies or other TV programs. I just stream on the Internet, so I don't see many advertisements on my phone.

'Forward them' is incorrect in this context; 'skip them' is appropriate. 'Much advertisement' should be 'many advertisements' for countable nouns. 'I will just screaming' is incorrect; 'I just stream' is correct. Also, repeated words and prepositions are corrected for clarity.