游泳— Part 1 评分报告

建议: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ เช่น ใช้ 'helps me stay fit' แทน 'helped me staying fit' และ 'I often swim' แทน 'I often swimming' นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

示例: Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helps me stay fit. For example, I often swim at my local pool, and I find that after a busy day at work, swimming is very relaxing. It's a full-body workout that helps me maintain good health.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น ใช้ 'learning to swim' แทน 'learning swimming' และ 'beginners' แทน 'beginner' รวมถึงปรับประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด

示例: Yes, learning to swim can be challenging, especially for beginners who may feel scared of the water. However, with regular practice, anyone can become a good and even professional swimmer.

建议: ประโยคนี้ไม่ชัดเจนและมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์ ควรตอบโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'People in my country like to swim in pools or at the beach during the hot summer holidays' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่จำเป็น

示例: In my country, people like to swim in swimming pools or at the beach during the summer holidays because the weather is very hot.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบมีความชัดเจนและสมบูรณ์ เช่น 'There are significant differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. For example, when swimming in the sea, you can see beautiful underwater environments, which is not possible in a pool.'

示例: There are significant differences between swimming in a pool and swimming in the sea. For instance, when you swim in the sea, you can enjoy the beautiful underwater environment, which you cannot see in a swimming pool.

× Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helped me staying fit.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helps me stay fit.

The verb 'helped' is in past tense but the context suggests a general truth, so present tense 'helps' is appropriate. Also, after 'help', the base form of the verb 'stay' should be used instead of 'staying'.

× For example, I often swimming at my local pool to realize that after busy work, swimming is good.

✓ For example, I often swim at my local pool and realize that after busy work, swimming is good.

The verb 'swimming' is incorrectly used instead of the base form 'swim' after 'often'. Also, 'to realize' is better replaced with 'and realize' to connect the ideas properly.

× It's a full body workout which help me maintain good health.

✓ It's a full body workout which helps me maintain good health.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'workout' (singular), so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number.

× Yes, learning swimming can be a challenge especially for beginner who may feel scared into the water.

✓ Yes, learning to swim can be a challenge especially for beginners who may feel scared of the water.

The phrase 'learning swimming' is incorrect; it should be 'learning to swim'. 'Beginner' should be plural 'beginners' to match the context. 'Scared into the water' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'scared of the water'.

× However, you can practice and being a good being and professional swimming.

✓ However, you can practice and become a good and professional swimmer.

After 'can', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'being' is incorrect; 'become' is correct. 'Being a good being' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'a good and professional swimmer'.

× In my country if you put off in people going to swim at swimming pool or beach during the summer holiday because the season was really hot.

✓ In my country, people usually go swimming at the swimming pool or beach during the summer holiday because the season is really hot.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'If you put off in people going to swim' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the tense and structure.

× Swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea difference like significant.

✓ The difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea is significant.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verb. The corrected sentence properly structures the subject and predicate.

× Firstly, people who swim in the swimming pool cannot see excellent environment in the in underwater.

✓ Firstly, people who swim in the swimming pool cannot see the excellent environment underwater.

The phrase 'in the in underwater' is incorrect and redundant. 'The' is needed before 'excellent environment'. 'Underwater' is used as an adverb here, so 'in' is unnecessary.