游泳— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态不一致，应该保持时态统一。此外，句子结构稍显重复，可以更简洁自然。

示例: Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helps me relax and feel joyful, especially when I am stressed or anxious.

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，'swimming act'用词不准确，且句子连接不够流畅。建议使用更地道的表达并增加连接词。

示例: Yes, I think learning to swim is difficult. When I was a child, my mom took me to swimming lessons, and I found the techniques challenging. Moreover, the coach was quite impatient, which made it harder to learn.

建议: 回答内容较为笼统，缺少具体地点描述。建议直接回答问题并提供具体例子，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: In my country, especially in Shenzhen, people often go to public swimming pools or nearby beaches to swim. Since life is stressful, swimming helps them relax and unwind.

建议: 表达较好，但有语法错误，如'in the contrast'应为'on the other hand'，且部分词汇搭配不当。建议注意固定搭配和语法。

示例: In my opinion, swimming in a pool is better for practice because the water is calm and the environment is controlled. On the other hand, swimming in the sea allows us to feel closer to nature.

× Yes, I really enjoy swimming, especially when I was stressed or anxious because when I was swimming I feel totally relaxed and joyful.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy swimming, especially when I am stressed or anxious because when I am swimming I feel totally relaxed and joyful.

这里的时间是现在时态，描述的是一般情况，所以应该用现在时态的动词。原句中使用了过去时态（was），与句意不符。建议将was改为am。

× I say yes. When I was a kid, my mom led me to attend a swimming lesson.

✓ I say yes. When I was a kid, my mom took me to attend a swimming lesson.

动词短语“led me to attend”不符合英语习惯表达，通常用“take someone to do something”表示带某人去做某事。这里应使用过去时态的“took”。

× In this lesson, I remember that the swimming act is difficult and the coach is really impatient.

✓ In this lesson, I remember that swimming is difficult and the coach is really impatient.

“the swimming act”表达不自然，应该直接用“swimming”表示游泳这项活动。去掉“the”和“act”更符合英语习惯。

× Most people are busy with working and studying, so I think the reason why people like swimming is to be relaxed.

✓ Most people are busy working and studying, so I think the reason why people like swimming is to relax.

“busy with working”不符合英语习惯，通常说“busy doing something”，即直接用动名词作宾语。且“to be relaxed”应改为“to relax”，表示主动放松。

× In my opinion, swimming in the pool is more likely to practice myself because the water is calm and the environment is controlled.

✓ In my opinion, swimming in the pool is more likely to help me practice because the water is calm and the environment is controlled.

“more likely to practice myself”表达不正确，应该用“help me practice”表示帮助我练习。

× In the contrast, swimming in the sea can make us feel more close to the nature.

✓ In contrast, swimming in the sea can make us feel closer to nature.

“In the contrast”应为固定短语“In contrast”。“more close”错误，比较级应为“closer”。“the nature”前不加冠词，直接用“nature”。