游泳— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi mâu thuẫn và không tự nhiên khi nói bạn thích bơi nhưng lại không biết bơi. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và tránh dùng cấu trúc câu phức tạp không cần thiết. Hãy tập trung vào việc diễn đạt ý một cách tự nhiên và ngắn gọn.

示例: Yes, I enjoy being around water and visiting swimming pools because it makes me feel happy and relaxed, even though I haven't learned to swim yet.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách nối câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối phù hợp để làm rõ ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như viết hoa không đúng chỗ.

示例: I haven't learned how to swim yet, but I think it can be quite challenging at first because it requires good coordination and confidence in the water.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời câu kết không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn về địa điểm và lý do.

示例: People in my country often go swimming at popular places like Harlem Bay or local beaches because these spots are refreshing and enjoyable.

建议: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng bạn có thể thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và mở rộng ý với ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể hơn để tăng tính thuyết phục.

示例: I think the main difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea is the environment. For example, the pool is smaller and controlled, so it's easier and safer to swim there, whereas the sea can be unpredictable with waves and currents.

× Yes, I like swimming, although I cannot swim, but when I come to the swimming pool I feel happy and positive.

✓ Yes, I like swimming, although I cannot swim. When I come to the swimming pool, I feel happy and positive.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. Use either 'although' or 'but' to connect contrasting ideas, not both. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× Actually I haven't learned how to swim yet, but The thing is can be quite challenging at first because it requires good coordination and confidence in the water.

✓ Actually, I haven't learned how to swim yet, but it can be quite challenging at first because it requires good coordination and confidence in the water.

The phrase 'The thing is can be' is ungrammatical and confusing. Replacing it with 'it can be' corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning.

× People in my country like to go to swim in some place, some famous places about swimming like Harlem Bay or beaches in town, because it's really cool and really.

✓ People in my country like to go swimming in some places, famous places for swimming like Harlem Bay or beaches in town, because it's really cool.

The phrase 'go to swim' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go swimming'. 'Some place' should be plural 'some places' to match the context. 'About swimming' is incorrect; 'for swimming' is appropriate. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and really', which is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× The pool is smaller than the water in the sea, so it's easier and safer to swim there.

✓ The pool is smaller than the sea, so it's easier and safer to swim there.

Comparing 'the pool' to 'the water in the sea' is awkward; the correct comparison is between 'the pool' and 'the sea'. This corrects the singular/plural and comparison object issue.