游泳— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to make it more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'how to swim' twice and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, 'I don't like swimming because I can't swim yet, but I plan to learn soon.'

示例: I don't like swimming because I can't swim yet, but I plan to learn soon because it's a useful skill and good exercise.

建议: Your answer is understandable but a bit long and repetitive. Try to use linking words and avoid repeating 'learn how to swim'. Also, be more specific about what was difficult. For example, 'I haven't fully learned to swim, but when I tried as a child, I found it hard to stay balanced in the water.'

示例: I haven't fully learned to swim, but when I tried as a child, I found it hard to stay balanced and feel comfortable in the water.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use simpler sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to compare. For example, 'People in my country usually swim in swimming halls located in party places and hotels. Wealthier people prefer hotels with better facilities, while others go to party palaces or public pools.'

示例: People in my country usually swim in swimming halls located in party places and hotels. Wealthier people prefer hotels with better facilities, while others go to party palaces or public pools.

建议: Your answer is honest but lacks clarity and contains errors. Try to be more concise and use correct grammar. Also, explain the difference clearly. For example, 'My country is landlocked, so I haven't experienced swimming in the sea. However, I think swimming in the sea is different from a pool because of waves and safety risks.'

示例: My country is landlocked, so I haven't experienced swimming in the sea. However, I think swimming in the sea is different from a pool because of waves and safety risks.

× Actually, I don't like swimming since I don't know how to swim, but I intend on learning how to swim in the near future.

✓ Actually, I don't like swimming since I don't know how to swim, but I intend to learn how to swim in the near future.

The phrase 'intend on learning' is incorrect; the correct form is 'intend to learn'. 'Intend' is followed by the infinitive form of the verb without 'on'. This is a common modal verb usage error.

× Well, I'm not sure about that since I haven't experienced how to learn to swim, but once when I was younger I tried to learn how to swim but it was pretty difficult for me to learn and be stable in the water.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about that since I haven't experienced learning how to swim, but once when I was younger I tried to learn how to swim, and it was pretty difficult for me to learn and be stable in the water.

The phrase 'experienced how to learn to swim' is incorrect; 'experienced learning how to swim' is correct because 'experience' is followed by a gerund. Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity.

× The people in our country prefer going to swimming at a swim, swimming halls that are present in different kind of party places, party palaces and hotels and people with people who are well there before going to hotels that are more expensive with better swimming facilities, while people who are less wealthier before going to party palaces and swimming homes.

✓ The people in our country prefer going swimming at swimming halls that are present in different kinds of party places, party palaces, and hotels. Wealthier people go to more expensive hotels with better swimming facilities, while less wealthy people go to party palaces and swimming homes.

Incorrect prepositions like 'going to swimming at a swim' should be corrected to 'going swimming at swimming halls'. Also, 'different kind' should be 'different kinds' (plural). The sentence was very long and confusing, so it was split for clarity and corrected for preposition and plural usage.

× The people in our country prefer going to swimming at a swim, swimming halls that are present in different kind of party places, party palaces and hotels and people with people who are well there before going to hotels that are more expensive with better swimming facilities, while people who are less wealthier before going to party palaces and swimming homes.

✓ The people in our country prefer going swimming at swimming halls that are present in different kinds of party places, party palaces, and hotels. Wealthier people go to more expensive hotels with better swimming facilities, while less wealthy people go to party palaces and swimming homes.

The phrase 'different kind' should be 'different kinds' because 'kinds' is plural when referring to multiple types. Also, 'people who are less wealthier' is incorrect; 'less wealthy' is the correct comparative form.

× while people who are less wealthier before going to party palaces and swimming homes.

✓ while less wealthy people go to party palaces and swimming homes.

The phrase 'less wealthier' is incorrect because 'wealthier' is already a comparative adjective. The correct form is 'less wealthy'.

× Well, I'm not sure about the answer since as a matter of fact we don't have any C in our country as our country is a landlocked country between two big countries, India's and China.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about the answer since, as a matter of fact, we don't have any sea in our country as our country is a landlocked country between two big countries, India and China.

The letter 'C' is incorrect; it should be 'sea'. Also, 'India's and China' is incorrect; it should be 'India and China' without possessive form. This is a singular and plural issue and incorrect use of possessive form.

× So our country are pretty unfor.

✓ So our country is pretty unfamiliar.

The verb 'are' does not agree with the singular subject 'country'. It should be 'is'. Also, 'unfor' is incomplete and should be 'unfamiliar'. This is a subject-verb agreement and spelling issue.

× So our country are pretty unfor.

✓ So our country is pretty unfamiliar.

The subject 'country' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'.

× Our country is pretty unfamiliar with the sea but in my opinion, uh, it is almost the same on except the fact that is a different risk.

✓ Our country is pretty unfamiliar with the sea, but in my opinion, it is almost the same except for the fact that there is a different risk.

The phrase 'almost the same on except the fact that is a different risk' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'almost the same except for the fact that there is a different risk'. 'Except for' is the correct preposition, and 'there is' is needed for clarity.