游泳— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'Put up my face on the water well.' Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: No, I don't like swimming because I'm not good at it. When I was a child, my mother took me to swimming classes, but I struggled to learn. Even now, I find it difficult to keep my face above the water properly.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'a good teacher of PE income help'. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

示例: Yes, I believe learning to swim is difficult for many people. However, with proper guidance from a good physical education teacher, they can learn more effectively.

建议: Your answer contains many hesitations and unclear phrases like 'go to see and the beach' and 'What instead of that'. Try to speak more fluently and use correct vocabulary. Also, organise your answer logically with linking words and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

示例: When I was a child, many people enjoyed swimming at the beach. However, due to climate change, the situation has changed. Nowadays, many young people prefer swimming pools because they are more comfortable and pleasant.

建议: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Phrases like 'taste of water is a very different' and 'sort of see usually a reminder many people that it is nature' are confusing. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to compare the two places.

示例: The main difference is the water itself. Sea water tastes salty and reminds people of nature, while pool water is treated and usually has a chemical smell.

× Put up my face on the water well.

✓ Put my face up on the water well.

The phrase 'Put up my face on the water well' is incorrect because the verb 'put' should be followed by the object 'my face' and then the prepositional phrase 'up on the water'. The original sentence incorrectly places 'up' before 'my face', which disrupts the correct verb + object + preposition order. The correct form is 'Put my face up on the water well.'

× I think it is not easy for many people to learn how to swim a well themselves, but I think a good education by a good teacher of PE income help them understand how to swim well.

✓ I think it is not easy for many people to learn how to swim well by themselves, but I think good education by a good PE teacher can help them understand how to swim well.

The phrase 'swim a well' is incorrect because 'well' is an adverb and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Also, 'income help' is incorrect; it should be 'can help'. The phrase 'by themselves' is more appropriate than 'themselves' alone. The corrected sentence removes the article before 'well' and corrects the modal verb usage and word order for clarity.

× When I was a child, many people loved to, uh, go to see and the beach.

✓ When I was a child, many people loved to go to the sea and the beach.

The phrase 'go to see' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the sea'. The preposition 'to' is correctly used before 'the sea', but 'see' is a verb and does not fit here. The correction replaces 'see' with 'sea', the noun referring to the body of water.

× But now there is a climate change that has changed the situation. What instead of that, many young people want to go to, uh, swimming pool, uh, because, uh, it is, uh, more pleasant.

✓ But now there is climate change that has changed the situation. Instead of that, many young people want to go to swimming pools because it is more pleasant.

The phrase 'a climate change' is incorrect; 'climate change' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. The sentence 'What instead of that' is ungrammatical and should be 'Instead of that'. Also, 'swimming pool' should be plural 'swimming pools' to generalize. The correction improves article usage, sentence structure, and removes unnecessary fillers for clarity.

× I think the taste of water is a very different between swimming in the sea and the swimming pool and sort of see usually a reminder many people that it is nature.

✓ I think the taste of water is very different between swimming in the sea and the swimming pool, and the sea usually reminds many people of nature.

The phrase 'a very different' is incorrect; 'different' is an adjective and should not be preceded by 'a' when used in this way. Also, 'sort of see usually a reminder many people that it is nature' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction rephrases this to 'the sea usually reminds many people of nature' for clarity and grammatical correctness.