朋友— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "I've known her" nên là "I've known" hoặc "I have known her". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "re stuck" và nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy chú ý đến cấu trúc câu và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I have a friend whom I've known for about 10 years. We met in kindergarten and have stayed close ever since because our personalities really match well.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ "home works" nên là "homework". Câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi nhỏ về cách dùng từ. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối như "usually", "sometimes" để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại từ "hang out" quá nhiều.

示例: On weekdays, we usually do homework together at a cafe or at each other's house. During weekends, we often go to the mall, watch movies, or cook and eat together at home.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến việc sử dụng thì động từ cho phù hợp (ví dụ "felt" nên là "feel" để đồng nhất thì hiện tại). Ngoài ra, tránh lặp lại cụm từ "each others" nhiều lần, có thể thay bằng "each other" hoặc "one another". Sử dụng từ nối như "if", "but" hợp lý để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: It depends on her mood. If we want to go out, we usually meet at the mall or a cafe. Otherwise, we meet at each other's houses since we live nearby.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi ngắn và không đầy đủ. Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách giải thích rõ hơn về lý do và cảm xúc của bạn. Ngoài ra, chú ý ngữ pháp như "school works" nên là "schoolwork". Tránh dùng từ không chính xác và thêm từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I used to go out with my friends a lot, but now we have more responsibilities like schoolwork and house chores, so I don't go out as often as before.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến số ít và số nhiều, ví dụ "friends is" nên là "friends are", "a friends" nên là "friends" hoặc "a friend". Câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp từ, bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy thêm ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

示例: I think friends are very important because they provide support when we face difficulties. For example, I can share my problems with them and get useful advice.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ "I'm a person too don't talks much" nên là "I'm a person who doesn't talk much". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh dùng câu dài và lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm lý do cụ thể cho lựa chọn của bạn.

示例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because when I hang out with just one friend, I sometimes feel awkward and don't know what to say.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý đến thì động từ, ví dụ "I felt like" nên là "I feel like" để đồng nhất thì hiện tại. Câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và thêm lý do cụ thể cho câu trả lời của bạn.

示例: Yes, I would invite friends to my home because it's a comfortable place where we can relax without dressing up. Also, my parents like my friends and often invite them over.

× Of course I have a friend that I've known her for like 10 years.

✓ Of course I have a friend that I've known for like 10 years.

The pronoun 'her' is unnecessary because 'that' already refers to the friend. Using both causes redundancy. Remove 'her' to correct the sentence.

× We meet when we're at kindergarten and re stuck with each other until now 'cause I think her personality and mind chess match on another level.

✓ We met when we were at kindergarten and have stuck with each other until now because I think her personality and mind are a chess match on another level.

The verb 'meet' should be in past tense 'met' to indicate a past event. 'We're' should be 'were' for past tense. 'Re stuck' is incorrect; 'have stuck' is correct to show continuation until now. Also, 'mind chess match' needs 'are a' to be grammatically correct.

× Well it depends on the week days we would usually hang out by doing a home works together at cafe or at each others house.

✓ Well, it depends on the weekdays; we would usually hang out by doing homework together at a cafe or at each other's house.

'Week days' should be 'weekdays' as one word. 'A home works' is incorrect; 'homework' is uncountable and does not take 'a' or plural form. 'Each others house' should be 'each other's house' to show possession.

× But if it's in the weekends we would hang out at the mall or we would watch movies or just simply Hangouts at each other in house cooking and eating together.

✓ But if it's on the weekends, we would hang out at the mall or watch movies or just simply hang out at each other's house, cooking and eating together.

Use 'on the weekends' not 'in the weekends'. 'Hangouts' is a noun; the verb form is 'hang out'. 'At each other in house' is incorrect; correct form is 'at each other's house'.

× If we like to play outside that day, we would meet each others at the mall or a cafe.

✓ If we like to play outside that day, we would meet each other at the mall or a cafe.

'Each others' is incorrect; the correct reciprocal pronoun is 'each other'.

× But if we felt like playing inside, we will meet at each others house because our houses were really close to each others.

✓ But if we feel like playing inside, we will meet at each other's house because our houses are really close to each other.

'Each others' should be 'each other's' to show possession. Also, 'were' should be 'are' to indicate present tense. The second 'each others' should be 'each other' as a reciprocal pronoun.

× Well, I used to go out with my friends a lot, but as we grew up we have much more responsibilities to deal with, maybe like school works or house chores.

✓ Well, I used to go out with my friends a lot, but as we grew up, we have many more responsibilities to deal with, maybe like schoolwork or house chores.

'School works' is incorrect; 'schoolwork' is uncountable and singular. 'Much more' is used with uncountable nouns; 'many more' is correct for countable nouns like 'responsibilities'.

× Personally, I believe that friends is a really crucial parts of a human's life because if we have a friends, we can like tell anything to them if we were struggling with something and if we need advice and we can also ask them.

✓ Personally, I believe that friends are really crucial parts of a human's life because if we have friends, we can tell them anything if we are struggling with something and if we need advice, we can also ask them.

'Friends is' should be 'friends are' to agree in number. 'A friends' is incorrect; 'friends' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'We were struggling' should be 'we are struggling' to maintain present tense.

× For me, I'm a person too don't talks much, so I would prefer to hang out with a group of friends because sometimes hang out with the friends, I don't know what to say and it's like it's gonna be awkward between us.

✓ For me, I'm a person who doesn't talk much, so I would prefer to hang out with a group of friends because sometimes when I hang out with friends, I don't know what to say and it feels like it's going to be awkward between us.

'Too don't talks' is incorrect; correct form is 'who doesn't talk'. 'Sometimes hang out with the friends' needs a subject and verb: 'sometimes when I hang out with friends'. 'It's gonna' is informal; 'it's going to' is better.

× Yeah, of course I would invite friends to my home because I felt like.

✓ Yeah, of course I would invite friends to my home because I feel like it.

'Felt like' is past tense but the context is present; 'feel like it' is correct. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'it' completes the thought.

× And also my parents really like my friends and they would ask my friends hang out at our homes.

✓ And also, my parents really like my friends and they would ask my friends to hang out at our home.

The verb 'ask' requires 'to' before the verb 'hang out'. 'Homes' should be singular 'home' if referring to one home.