网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答が不自然で文法的に不完全です。具体的な内容を明確にし、文をつなげる接続詞を使って自然な英語にしましょう。例えば、訪問するウェブサイトの種類や理由を詳しく述べることが重要です。

示例: I often visit shopping websites that sell clothes, makeup, and shoes because they motivate me to earn money and buy things I like.

建议: 文法ミスや表現の誤りがあります。'vote'は誤用で、'buy'や'shop'が適切です。また、情報を整理して、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

示例: My favorite website is Q10, a Korean shopping site where we can buy products at cheaper prices than usual. I usually purchase makeup there.

建议: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。'impression'は不適切で、'impressive'が正しいです。文をつなげて、具体的な変化を説明しましょう。

示例: Yes, the websites sometimes offer discounts twice a month, and their design changes for special events, which I find very impressive.

建议: 意味が不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りが多いです。'kill them'は誤用で、適切な表現に直す必要があります。人気の理由や特徴を具体的に述べることが大切です。

示例: Q10 is very popular in Japan because it offers good deals and has many advertisements displayed at the top of the page.

× I always visit shopping website.

✓ I always visit shopping websites.

The noun 'website' should be plural 'websites' because the student refers to multiple kinds of shopping websites, not just one.

× It is. Clothes, makeup and shoes.

✓ They are clothes, makeup, and shoes.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It is' is incomplete and does not connect properly to the list. Using 'They are' correctly refers to the items listed.

× It motivates to earn money.

✓ They motivate me to earn money.

The pronoun 'It' is incorrect because it refers to multiple items (clothes, makeup, shoes). Also, the verb 'motivate' requires an object, so 'me' is added for clarity.

× My favorite website is Q10. It is Korean website and we we can vote cheaper than usual prices.

✓ My favorite website is Q10. It is a Korean website and we can buy things cheaper than usual prices.

The article 'a' is missing before 'Korean website'. Also, 'vote' is incorrect in this context; 'buy things' is appropriate. The repeated 'we' is a typo and removed.

× I usually buy makeup at this website.

✓ I usually buy makeup from this website.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to purchasing from a website; 'from' is the correct preposition.

× Yes, they sometime have discounts.

✓ Yes, they sometimes have discounts.

The adverb 'sometimes' was misspelled as 'sometime'. Correct adverb usage is necessary here.

× Twice a month and sometimes the design changes for event.

✓ They have discounts twice a month, and sometimes the design changes for events.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a subject. Adding 'They have discounts' clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× It is very impression.

✓ It is very impressive.

The adjective 'impression' is a noun; the correct adjective form is 'impressive' to describe the design.

× Also Q10 is most popular in Japan because when people watch Internet they kill them.

✓ Also, Q10 is most popular in Japan because when people watch the Internet, they kill time.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'kill them' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'kill time' meaning to pass time.

× Advertising always are on the top of.

✓ Advertisements are always at the top.

'Advertising' is uncountable and should be 'Advertisements' here. The phrase 'on the top of' is incorrect; 'at the top' is the correct prepositional phrase.