网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce filler words, give a clear topic sentence, and add one specific example with linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Work on grammar (plural/singular) and natural phrasing.

示例: I often visit social media sites like Instagram and Twitter for news and photos. Additionally, I use online shopping sites such as Coupang to compare prices and read reviews when I need household items. Because these sites save time and often offer discounts, they are very convenient for me.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the website, avoid repetition and fillers, correct grammar (e.g., "makes my daily life more convenient"), and give one concrete reason or example. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

示例: My favorite website is an online shopping site because I can buy everything without going out. For example, I recently ordered clothes and groceries and the fast delivery saved me time, which makes my daily life more convenient.

建议: Reply with a complete, clear statement about the changes, use linking words (however, since, now) and provide a specific example of an improvement. Avoid trailing off sentences and fillers.

示例: Yes. Websites have become much easier to use than before. Previously the interfaces were cluttered and the text was small, so I struggled to find products; however, now they have clearer navigation and larger fonts, which helps me shop faster and more comfortably.

建议: Give a direct statement, avoid filler words, and finish your thought. Provide a specific reason or example of how people use those sites. Use linking words for coherence.

示例: In Korea, social media sites such as Instagram and Facebook are very popular. This is because smartphones and fast Internet allow people to share photos and reviews quickly; for instance, many Koreans use Instagram to follow food trends and decide where to eat.

× Well, I usually use umm, social media websites such as umm, Instagram or umm, Twitter's.

✓ Well, I usually use social media websites such as Instagram or Twitter.

The original uses an incorrect possessive form 'Twitter's' and unnecessary filler words. Use the base names of websites without apostrophes. Remove fillers like 'umm' for clarity. This fixes a subject naming error and improves formality.

× In addition, I also use online shopping mall websites to search some products and useful commodities.

✓ In addition, I also use online shopping websites to search for products and useful items.

'Shopping mall websites' is wordy; 'online shopping websites' is more natural. The verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by the object searched. 'Commodities' is formal and odd here; 'items' or 'products' is more natural.

× I think it is really convenient to use.

✓ I think they are really convenient to use.

The subject refers to plural 'websites' so use 'they are' instead of 'it is'. Also match plural agreement. 'Really convenient to use' is correct placement.

× Well, as I said that before, my favorite website is umm shopping webs shopping website.

✓ Well, as I said before, my favorite websites are online shopping sites.

The sentence repeats and uses awkward phrasing. Use 'as I said before' (no 'that'). The speaker earlier mentioned multiple sites, so plural 'websites' fits. Replace colloquial 'webs' with 'sites'.

× This is mainly because I don't have to dress up to go to the department stores or marketplaces.

✓ This is mainly because I don't have to dress up to go to department stores or markets.

Use plural without definite article when speaking generally: 'department stores' and 'markets'. 'Dress up to go to' is acceptable; remove 'the' for general reference.

× So it makes my daily life much conveniently and it improves my quality of life.

✓ So it makes my daily life much more convenient and improves my quality of life.

Use the adjective 'convenient' after 'more' rather than the adverb 'conveniently'. Also combine clauses: 'improves' without repeating 'it' is smoother.

× Yes, I think so. There are several changes compared to the past.

✓ Yes, I think so. There have been several changes compared with the past.

When referring to changes that occurred over time up to now, use present perfect 'have been' rather than simple present 'are'. 'Compared with' is more natural than 'compared to' here.

× Well, in the past it has quite umm, difficult interface and too small typography, so it was really hard to find items that I really want.

✓ Well, in the past it had a quite difficult interface and very small typography, so it was really hard to find the items that I wanted.

When talking about the past, use past tense 'had' and 'wanted'. Add 'a' before 'quite difficult interface'. Use 'very small' rather than 'too small' for natural phrasing, and include 'the' before 'items' if referring to specific items previously mentioned.

× However, now it's.

✓ However, now it is much easier to find items.

'However, now it's.' is a fragment; complete the thought. Provide a full clause appropriate to contrast with the previous sentence.

× In my country, Korea, many people use social media websites like umm, Instagrams or Facebook.

✓ In my country, Korea, many people use social media websites like Instagram or Facebook.

Do not pluralize proper nouns like 'Instagram'. Use singular names for platforms. Remove filler 'umm'.

× I think this is merely because the sophisticated technology has developed and people can share their experiences online easily and.

✓ I think this is mainly because technology has become more advanced and people can easily share their experiences online.

'Merely' is odd; 'mainly' or 'partly' fits better. Use 'technology has become more advanced' (natural phrasing) instead of 'the sophisticated technology has developed'. Move adverb 'easily' before the verb 'share'. Remove trailing 'and' and finish the sentence properly.