假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use the past tense consistently and avoid repeating the same information. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: I went to Taiwan for my last holiday because it is close to Hong Kong, making it convenient and affordable. Moreover, I enjoyed trying local dishes such as delicious beef noodles, which made the trip memorable.

建议: Focus on using correct grammar and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to be more specific about how holidays help you relax and what you enjoy doing.

示例: Yes, I like holidays because they give me a break from work and help me relax after a stressful period. For example, I enjoy treating myself to snacks like potato chips and chocolate, which I usually avoid during busy times.

建议: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons why you like Christmas.

示例: I like the Christmas holiday best because it is quite long in Hong Kong, allowing me to relax. Additionally, I enjoy eating festive foods and seeing Christmas decorations, which create a peaceful atmosphere.

建议: Use consistent verb tenses and correct grammar. Link your ideas clearly and provide specific examples of activities you do during holidays.

示例: During my holidays, I usually read books and play games. I also spend time learning coding, which is a hobby of mine and helps me gain useful skills for the future.

建议: Avoid informal or negative self-descriptions and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and complete your sentences.

示例: I prefer spending my day at home because I find it more comfortable and relaxing. Going out requires preparation, and I often forget things, so staying home suits me better.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and use varied vocabulary. Link your ideas smoothly and explain your preferences with clear reasons.

示例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I dislike feeling stressed. This way, I can relax and enjoy my time without any pressure.

建议: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express your preferences more clearly and naturally.

示例: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because an exciting one can be exhausting. I like to recharge my energy and avoid feeling tired during my time off.

× I go to Taiwan last holiday because Taiwan is near Hong Kong and it's very convenient and affordable for me to go to Taiwan, and because Taiwan has many local cuisines like beef noodles and it's very delicious for me and I like to go to Taiwan.

✓ I went to Taiwan last holiday because Taiwan is near Hong Kong and it's very convenient and affordable for me to go to Taiwan, and because Taiwan has many local cuisines like beef noodles and they're very delicious to me and I like to go to Taiwan.

The sentence uses the present tense 'go' to describe a past event 'last holiday'. The correct tense for past events is the past tense 'went'. Also, 'it's very delicious for me' should be 'they're very delicious to me' because 'cuisines' is plural and 'delicious' describes the plural noun, so the pronoun and verb must agree in number.

× Yes, of course, during my holiday I don't need to go to work and so that I can feel relax instead of feeling very stressed from the high pressure environment.

✓ Yes, of course, during my holiday I don't need to go to work so I can feel relaxed instead of feeling very stressed from the high pressure environment.

The phrase 'so that I can feel relax' is incorrect because 'feel' should be followed by an adjective, and 'relax' is a verb. The correct adjective is 'relaxed'. Also, 'and so that' is redundant; 'so' alone is sufficient to express purpose.

× And I can change some things like cola and eat something I like, like potato chips and chocolate.

✓ And I can have some things like cola and eat things I like, like potato chips and chocolate.

The verb 'change' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'have' or 'consume'. Also, 'something I like' should be plural 'things I like' to match the examples given.

× I like the Christmas holiday the best because I can.

✓ I like the Christmas holiday the best because it is very enjoyable.

The sentence 'because I can.' is incomplete and does not explain why the student likes the Christmas holiday. A complete sentence with a clear reason is needed.

× And in Christmas we can see many souvenir related to Jesus and it's very quiet.

✓ And at Christmas we can see many souvenirs related to Jesus and it's very quiet.

The correct preposition for holidays is 'at Christmas' not 'in Christmas'. Also, 'souvenir' should be plural 'souvenirs' to match 'many'.

× I I read some books and playing some games on my holidays.

✓ I read some books and play some games on my holidays.

The verb forms should be parallel. 'I read' is simple present, so 'playing' should be 'play' to maintain parallel structure.

× Also I will learn some coding on holiday because coding is one of my habit in my free time and these behaviors can help me learn more knowledge in the future.

✓ Also I will learn some coding on holiday because coding is one of my habits in my free time and these activities can help me learn more in the future.

'Habit' should be plural 'habits' because 'one of my' requires a plural noun. 'Behaviors' is better replaced with 'activities' in this context. 'Learn more knowledge' is incorrect; 'learn more' or 'gain more knowledge' is correct.

× I like to spend my day at home because I'm just a lazy person and I don't want to go out because when you go out you need to prepare a lot of things like properly proper properly clothes and a tissue or something.

✓ I like to spend my day at home because I'm just a lazy person and I don't want to go out because when I go out I need to prepare a lot of things like proper clothes and a tissue or something.

The pronoun 'you' is inconsistent with the first person 'I' used elsewhere. It should be 'I' to maintain consistency. Also, 'properly proper properly clothes' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'proper clothes'.

× I will always forgot what to bring when I go out so I would prefer spend.

✓ I always forget what to bring when I go out so I would prefer to stay at home.

'Will always forgot' is incorrect; 'forgot' is past tense but 'will' requires base verb 'forget'. The correct phrase is 'I always forget'. Also, 'prefer spend' is incomplete; it should be 'prefer to stay' or similar.

× I would prefer a leisurely holiday because I am not a very busy person and I don't like the kind of feeling stressed.

✓ I would prefer a leisurely holiday because I am not a very busy person and I don't like feeling stressed.

The phrase 'the kind of feeling stressed' is awkward and unnecessary. 'I don't like feeling stressed' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So if it is a leisurely holiday, I can do whatever I want and don't need to be very stressed from the environment.

✓ So if it is a leisurely holiday, I can do whatever I want and don't need to be very stressed by the environment.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'by' to indicate the cause of stress.

× I would prefer a peaceful holiday because if the thing if a holiday is too exciting I will lose many energy and so that I cannot I will feel very tired and feel very tiring is not what I prefer in my holidays.

✓ I would prefer a peaceful holiday because if a holiday is too exciting, I will lose a lot of energy and feel very tired, which is not what I prefer during my holidays.

The sentence is confusing and contains redundant phrases. 'Lose many energy' is incorrect; 'lose a lot of energy' is correct. 'Feel very tiring' is incorrect; 'feel very tired' is correct. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.