假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer wa natural desu ga, 'tasteful' wa tabemono ni tsukau toki wa fukuzatsu desu. 'Delicious' ya 'tasty' no hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu. Mata, 'I love to eat for a Vietnamese noodle soup' wa fuhanteki na bunshou desu. 'I especially love Vietnamese noodle soup because its broth is aromatic and flavorful' to iu fuu ni shite kudasai.

示例: Last holiday, I went to Vietnam. I especially loved Vietnamese noodle soup because its broth was very aromatic and flavorful.

建议: Answer wa rikai dekimasu ga, 'Surely' wa kono bunshou ni wa fukuzatsu sugiru kamoshiremasen. 'Definitely' ya 'Yes, I do' no hou ga shizen ni kikoemasu. Mata, 'I can do anything I wanna do' wa 'I can do whatever I want' to iu hou ga eigo no shizen na hyougen desu.

示例: Yes, I do like holidays because I have more time to rest and I can do whatever I want.

建议: Answer wa yoku kangaerarete imasu ga, 'in my district' wa sukoshi fukuzatsu desu. 'In my country' ya 'in my area' no hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu. Mata, 'I I can go to visit my parents' no 'I I' wa ichido dake ni shite kudasai.

示例: I like Golden Week the best because it's the longest holiday in my country. During Golden Week, I can visit my parents, which is very important to me.

建议: Answer wa totemo yoku dekimashita. Demo, 'stay in my home' wa 'stay at home' to iu hou ga shizen desu. Mata, 'do hobbies such as' wa 'do hobbies like' ya 'enjoy hobbies such as' to iu hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu.

示例: Usually, I stay at home and enjoy hobbies such as reading books or watching films on the Internet. Sometimes, I also visit my parents and friends, which is very important because we usually don't have much time.

建议: Answer wa rikai dekimasu ga, 'home based person' wa sukoshi fukuzatsu na hyougen desu. 'a homebody' to iu hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu. Mata, 'it this preference started' wa 'this preference started' to shite kudasai.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a homebody and I prefer staying home to going out. This preference started when I was a child.

建议: Answer wa wakariyasui desu ga, 'surely' wa kono bunshou ni wa fukuzatsu desu. 'because' ya 'since' no hou ga tsukaiyasui desu. Mata, 'recharge the energy to work' wa 'recharge my energy for work' to iu hou ga shizen desu.

示例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I want to relax and recharge my energy for work.

建议: Answer wa rikai dekimasu ga, 'refresh for work' wa sukoshi fukuzatsu desu. 'refresh myself for work' ya 'feel refreshed for work' to iu hou ga yoku tsukawaremasu. Mata, 'if your holiday is busy' wa 'if the holiday is busy' to shite kudasai.

示例: I'd prefer a peaceful holiday because if the holiday is busy, you cannot refresh yourself for work. I want to recharge my energy during holidays.

× Last holiday I went to Vietnam and the local food is very tasteful and especially I love to eat for a Vietnamese noodle soup which broth is so aromatic and flavorful.

✓ Last holiday I went to Vietnam and the local food is very tasteful and especially I love to eat Vietnamese noodle soup whose broth is so aromatic and flavorful.

The preposition 'for' before 'a Vietnamese noodle soup' is incorrect. We say 'eat' followed directly by the object without 'for'. Also, 'which broth' should be 'whose broth' to correctly refer to the soup's broth.

× Surely I like holidays because on holiday I I will have much more time to rest and I can do anything I wanna do.

✓ Surely I like holidays because on holiday I have much more time to rest and I can do anything I want to do.

The use of 'will have' is incorrect here because the sentence talks about a general truth or habitual action, so present tense 'have' is appropriate. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.

× Oh well, I like Golden Week the best because it's the longest holiday in my district and. During Golden Week, I I can go to visit my parents and it's very important.

✓ Oh well, I like Golden Week the best because it's the longest holiday in my district. During Golden Week, I can visit my parents and it's very important.

The sentence was fragmented with an unnecessary 'and.' Also, 'go to visit' is redundant; 'visit' alone is sufficient and more natural in this context.

× Well, usually I stay in my home and do hobbies such as reading books or watching films on the Internet, and sometimes I also visit my parents and friends. It's very important because we usually don't have much time.

✓ Well, usually I stay at home and do hobbies such as reading books or watching films on the Internet, and sometimes I also visit my parents and friends. It's very important because we usually don't have much time.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'home'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to being at one's home.

× Uh, it this preference started since I was a child.

✓ Uh, this preference started when I was a child.

The phrase 'it this preference' is incorrect; 'this preference' is correct. Also, 'since' is used with present perfect tense; here, 'when' is appropriate with past tense 'started'.

× I prefer a leisurely holiday, surely, and the reason is that I want to relax during holidays to recharge the energy to work.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday, surely, and the reason is that I want to relax during holidays to recharge my energy for work.

The phrase 'recharge the energy to work' is incorrect. It should be 'recharge my energy for work' to correctly express the purpose and possession.

× I'd prefer a peaceful holiday because if your holiday is busy, you cannot refresh for work and I want to recharge my energy for work during holidays.

✓ I'd prefer a peaceful holiday because if a holiday is busy, you cannot refresh for work and I want to recharge my energy for work during holidays.

Using 'your holiday' is inappropriate when speaking generally. It should be 'a holiday' to refer to holidays in general.