假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、具体的な体験を加えると良いです。例えば、「I went to Thailand with my friend who is in the same school as me. It was a memorable experience because I could try many new things, such as tasting local food and visiting temples.」のように。

示例: I went to Thailand with my friend who is in the same school as me. It was a memorable experience because I could try many new things, such as tasting local food and visiting temples.

建议: 文の構造を整理し、意味が明確になるようにしましょう。また、「stay home in activity」は不自然なので、「stay home and relax」などに変えましょう。

示例: Yes, I definitely like holidays because I can visit many places like parks or museums, and sometimes I stay home and relax.

建议: 文が途中で終わっているため、完全な文にしましょう。また、「holiday for winter」より「winter holiday」の方が自然です。具体的な理由も加えると良いです。

示例: My favorite public holiday is the winter holiday because I can enjoy the Christmas atmosphere. Also, I celebrate my birthday in winter, which makes this season very special for me.

建议: 「active active」は繰り返しで不自然です。また、「go to drive」は「go for a drive」が正しい表現です。文をつなげて自然にしましょう。

示例: I try to be active on holidays by hanging out with my friends and going for a drive with my family. Recently, we went to Gifu to have a BBQ.

建议: 文が途中で終わっているため、完全な文にしましょう。「spend holiday in my home all the day」は「spend the whole day at home」の方が自然です。

示例: Yes, I occasionally spend the whole day at home during holidays. It helps me relax and recharge.

建议: 「busy holiday」より「a busy holiday」が正しいです。「standing about inactivity」は不自然なので、「being inactive」などに変えましょう。文を最後まで書きましょう。

示例: I prefer a busy holiday because I think being inactive is a waste of time. So I like to visit places and hang out with my friends.

建议: 「exciting holiday」より「an exciting holiday」が正しいです。「like I what I have not experienced」は不自然なので、「things I have never experienced before」などに変えましょう。

示例: I prefer an exciting holiday because it means I can experience new things that I have never experienced before. It makes me happy.

× I went to go to Thailand with my friend who is same school now.

✓ I went to Thailand with my friend who is in the same school now.

The phrase 'went to go to' is incorrect; 'went to' is sufficient to express past travel. Also, 'who is same school now' lacks the preposition 'in' and the article 'the' before 'same school'. The correct form is 'who is in the same school now'.

× I went to go to Thailand with my friend who is same school now.

✓ I went to Thailand with my friend who is in the same school now.

The preposition 'in' is necessary to indicate the location or affiliation with the school. Without it, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× It was so memorable experience because I could undergo new things.

✓ It was such a memorable experience because I could undergo new things.

The phrase 'so memorable experience' is incorrect; 'such a memorable experience' is the correct form when modifying a noun with an adjective. 'So' is used with adjectives or adverbs, but when followed by a noun, 'such a' is appropriate.

× I definitely like holidays because I can go to many places like the park or museums and I can stay home in activity.

✓ I definitely like holidays because I can go to many places like the park or museums and I can stay home and be active.

The phrase 'stay home in activity' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'stay home and be active' or 'stay home and do activities'. 'In activity' is not a proper prepositional phrase here.

× It's holiday for winter because I can feel the atmosphere of Christmas and actually I celebrate my birthday in winter, so it makes my.

✓ It's the holiday in winter because I can feel the atmosphere of Christmas and actually I celebrate my birthday in winter, so it makes me happy.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object after 'makes my'. Also, 'holiday for winter' should be 'the holiday in winter' to specify the time. The phrase 'makes me happy' completes the thought.

× I try to be active active so I can hang out with my friend and go to drive with my family.

✓ I try to be active so I can hang out with my friends and go for a drive with my family.

The repetition 'active active' is an error. 'Hang out with my friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally. 'Go to drive' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go for a drive'.

× Recently I went to Gifu with my family. To do BBQ.

✓ Recently I went to Gifu with my family to do BBQ.

The sentence fragment 'To do BBQ.' is incomplete and should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence.

× Yes, I occasionally spend holiday in my home all the day and it makes me relaxing and I can.

✓ Yes, I occasionally spend holidays at my home all day and it makes me relaxed.

'Spend holiday in my home all the day' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'spend holidays at my home all day'. Also, 'makes me relaxing' should be 'makes me relaxed'. The sentence 'and I can.' is incomplete and should be omitted or completed.

× I prefer busy holiday because I think standing about inactivity is waste of time.

✓ I prefer busy holidays because I think standing about inactivity is a waste of time.

'Busy holiday' should be plural 'busy holidays' to match the general preference. Also, 'is waste of time' requires the article 'a' before 'waste'.

× So I prefer go to places and hang out with my.

✓ So I prefer to go to places and hang out with my friends.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' before the base verb 'go'. Also, 'hang out with my' is incomplete; it should be 'hang out with my friends'.

× I prefer exciting holiday because it means I can experience new things like I what I have not experienced in my life.

✓ I prefer exciting holidays because it means I can experience new things that I have not experienced in my life.

'Exciting holiday' should be plural 'exciting holidays' to express a general preference. The phrase 'like I what I have not experienced' is incorrect; it should be 'that I have not experienced'.