假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more specific about the place and activities. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: After completing my 12th board exams, I went on a holiday for about four to five weeks. I visited the Germany Waterfall area, which has many camping sites and beautiful greenery. It was a long journey and a very enjoyable experience.

建议: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas. Be specific about how holidays help you relax and spend time with family.

示例: Yes, I definitely like holidays because they help me relax and reduce pressure. During holidays, I spend quality time with my family, which makes the day peaceful and enjoyable.

建议: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons. Be specific about what makes Diwali holidays special for you.

示例: I prefer Diwali holidays because they are wonderful. During this time, I visit my maternal uncle's house and spend time with my whole family, which makes the holiday very special.

建议: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Be specific about your travel plans and activities.

示例: On my holidays, I like to travel a lot. For long holidays like Diwali or Raksha Bandhan, I plan trips to explore my city. I also enjoy riding my bike during these travels.

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'if' and 'because' to explain your preferences clearly. Be specific about how spending time at home affects you.

示例: Yes, I like to spend my day at home depending on my mood. If I feel like travelling, I go out, but if I want to relax, I stay at home because it provides a peaceful environment.

建议: Clarify your ideas and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain reasons. Be specific about why you prefer busy holidays and what activities you do.

示例: I prefer busy holidays because I like to stay active. Being busy helps me forget my worries and enjoy my time more.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'if' and 'but' to connect ideas. Be specific about your preferences and reasons.

示例: It depends on the company. If I am with my friends, I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy their company. However, if I am with strangers, I prefer peaceful holidays to feel comfortable.

× When I was completed my 12th board exam, after a week, I go for uh, holidays, maybe for uh, more than four to five weeks.

✓ When I had completed my 12th board exam, after a week, I went for holidays, maybe for more than four to five weeks.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'was completed' instead of the past perfect 'had completed' to indicate an action completed before another past action. Also, 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past context. Use past perfect for the first action and simple past for the subsequent action.

× In Germany waterfall, there is a so many campings area and lot of greenery.

✓ In Germany waterfall, there are so many camping areas and lots of greenery.

'There is a so many campings area' is incorrect because 'campings' is not a correct plural noun; the correct plural is 'camping areas'. Also, 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun. 'Lot of' should be 'lots of' for correct quantifier usage.

× Yes definitely I really like holidays because it makes me feel relaxed and there is no pressure behind.

✓ Yes, definitely I really like holidays because they make me feel relaxed and there is no pressure.

'It makes me feel' should be 'they make me feel' because 'holidays' is plural. Also, 'there is no pressure behind' is awkward; 'there is no pressure' is sufficient and correct.

× We don't think about the new things. Yes we definitely think about future but not today because it's makes us relax.

✓ We don't think about new things. Yes, we definitely think about the future but not today because it makes us relax.

'It's makes' is incorrect; 'it makes' is correct as 'makes' already includes the 's' for third person singular. Also, 'the new things' should be 'new things' and 'about future' should be 'about the future' for correct article usage.

× On holidays are always like for families, spend time in and have a relaxed day.

✓ Holidays are always for families to spend time together and have a relaxed day.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. Correct sentence structure requires 'Holidays are for families to spend time together and have a relaxed day' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Public holiday, I prefer to like, uh, Diwali vacations because there is a wonderful holidays.

✓ For public holidays, I prefer Diwali vacations because they are wonderful holidays.

'There is a wonderful holidays' is incorrect because 'holidays' is plural, so 'there are' or 'they are' should be used. Also, 'prefer to like' is redundant; 'prefer' alone is sufficient.

× There we go our material uncles house, we spend time and we have whole family to spending a time.

✓ There we go to our maternal uncle's house, we spend time and we have the whole family spending time together.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'Material' should be 'maternal'. 'Uncles house' needs possessive form 'uncle's house'. 'Have whole family to spending a time' is incorrect; correct form is 'have the whole family spending time together'.

× Yeah, they had holidays are very best.

✓ Yeah, those holidays are the best.

'They had holidays are very best' is ungrammatical. Correct form is 'those holidays are the best' to express preference clearly.

× I usually do on my holidays.

✓ I usually do this on my holidays.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'this' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× I like to travel a lot that's why if there is a long holidays like Diwali or Raksha Bandhan.

✓ I like to travel a lot; that's why if there are long holidays like Diwali or Raksha Bandhan,

'There is a long holidays' is incorrect because 'holidays' is plural; it should be 'there are long holidays'. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× So definitely I will always plan to travel to my city and explore my city and I love to do travelling that's why I always ride bike also.

✓ So definitely I will always plan to travel to my city and explore it, and I love travelling; that's why I always ride a bike also.

'Do travelling' is incorrect; 'love travelling' is correct. 'Ride bike' needs an article: 'ride a bike'. Repetition of 'my city' can be replaced with 'it' for conciseness.

× Yes, definitely depends on my mood.

✓ Yes, it definitely depends on my mood.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'it' makes the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× I have a lot of mood swings if I'm thinking about travelling, so I go for a travelling if I'm thinking I want to spend time at my house.

✓ I have a lot of mood swings; if I'm thinking about travelling, I go travelling; if I want to spend time at my house, I do that.

'Go for a travelling' is incorrect; 'go travelling' is correct. The sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity. Also, 'if I'm thinking I want to spend time' is better as 'if I want to spend time'.

× And yes, it is also good to spend time at house because it makes us feel relaxed or peaceful environment.

✓ And yes, it is also good to spend time at home because it makes us feel relaxed in a peaceful environment.

'At house' should be 'at home'. 'Feel relaxed or peaceful environment' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relaxed in a peaceful environment'.

× Yes definitely if I'm spending.

✓ Yes, definitely if I'm spending time at home.

The sentence is incomplete and needs completion to make sense.

× I prefer busy holidays because I am a very old thing person so I really need to be busy.

✓ I prefer busy holidays because I am a very active person, so I really need to be busy.

'Old thing person' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'active person'. Correct adjective needed to convey meaning.

× So yes, definitely I really prefer busy holidays because it makes me to come from over things, come over from over things.

✓ So yes, definitely I really prefer busy holidays because it helps me get over things.

'Makes me to come from over things' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'helps me get over things' meaning to recover or move past issues.

× It's definitely depends on other persons.

✓ It definitely depends on other people.

'It's definitely depends' is incorrect; 'It definitely depends' is correct. Also, 'persons' is less common; 'people' is preferred.

× If there is a friends I always excited for holidays.

✓ If there are friends, I am always excited for holidays.

'There is a friends' is incorrect; 'there are friends' is correct because 'friends' is plural. 'I always excited' needs auxiliary verb 'am' to form 'I am always excited'.

× If there is a unknown person.

✓ If there is an unknown person,

'A unknown' is incorrect; 'an unknown' is correct because 'unknown' starts with a vowel sound. The sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× So definitely I prefer peaceful holidays because with unknowns I really don't excited that much.

✓ So definitely I prefer peaceful holidays because with unknown people I really am not that excited.

'I really don't excited' is incorrect; 'I am not excited' is correct. Also, 'unknowns' should be 'unknown people' for clarity.

× But my friends I always excited to spend the time with them.

✓ But with my friends, I am always excited to spend time with them.

'I always excited' needs auxiliary verb 'am' to form 'I am always excited'. Adding 'with' before 'my friends' improves sentence flow.