假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding incomplete sentences. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of "for my life last holiday," say "for my last holiday." Avoid ending with an incomplete sentence like "And on my next holiday I might."

示例: I went back home to the Philippines for my last holiday to attend a friend's wedding. I really enjoyed spending time with friends away from our home city.

建议: Make your sentences complete and clear. Use plural form when appropriate, e.g., "new cities." Avoid incomplete sentences like "so I make sure to know where." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I love holidays because they are the perfect time for me to explore new cities or to rest and recuperate before starting another school term. Therefore, I like to plan my trips carefully during holidays.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. Also, avoid ending sentences abruptly like "all over this."

示例: I like Christmas and New Year's the best because I grew up in a Catholic community. During December, my hometown becomes very festive with Christmas lights and huge Christmas trees everywhere, which I always enjoyed seeing.

建议: Try to avoid repeating similar ideas like "new scenery" and "see new sceneries." Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your sentences clearly. For example, instead of ending with "in this," finish the thought properly.

示例: I like to travel to new cities or countries during holidays because it allows me to experience different cultures and see new scenery. This helps me broaden my perspective and understand how other people live their daily lives.

建议: Avoid filler words like "umm" and make your sentences more natural and clear. Also, avoid redundancy such as "help me feel relaxed and help me to help my mind to get out." Instead, express your ideas simply and directly.

示例: Yes, I love spending my days at home. I enjoy watching TV, reading books, and binge-watching series. These activities help me relax and clear my mind.

建议: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For example, "buy my itinerary in in a detailed manner" is unclear and repetitive. Also, finish your thoughts completely instead of ending with "it helps me make it helps me feel." Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I prefer a relaxed holiday. I like to organize my itinerary in detail, setting specific times and places to visit each day. This helps me feel more comfortable and enjoy my trip.

建议: Make your sentences grammatically correct and clear. For example, "an exciting holiday with me adventures" should be "an exciting holiday with adventures." Also, avoid repeating words like "I'll be I'll feel." Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand" to connect contrasting ideas.

示例: I prefer a little bit of both. An exciting holiday with adventures makes the trip memorable; however, a peaceful holiday helps me relax so that when I return, I feel ready to work again.

× I went back home in the Philippines for my life last holiday.

✓ I went back home to the Philippines for my last holiday.

The phrase 'for my life last holiday' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'for my last holiday' to indicate the most recent holiday. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'to' when indicating movement towards a place.

× I went back home in the Philippines for my life last holiday.

✓ I went back home to the Philippines for my last holiday.

Use 'to' instead of 'in' when indicating movement towards a place. 'In' is used to indicate location, not direction.

× And on my next holiday I might.

✓ And on my next holiday, I might go again.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. Adding 'go again' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I think it's the perfect time for me to explore new city or to rest and recuperate before I get on working with another school term.

✓ I think it's the perfect time for me to explore a new city or to rest and recuperate before I get on working with another school term.

The noun 'city' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it when used in this context.

× I like to plan my trips around the holidays so I make sure to know where.

✓ I like to plan my trips around the holidays so I make sure to know where I am going.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'where'. Adding 'I am going' completes the sentence.

× I love growing up seeing Christmas lights and huge Christmas trees all over this.

✓ I loved growing up seeing Christmas lights and huge Christmas trees all over this place.

The phrase 'all over this' is incomplete. Adding 'place' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'love growing up' should be 'loved growing up' to indicate past experience.

× I do this because I get to experience different culture and new scenery, see new sceneries and just observe how other people live their daily lives.

✓ I do this because I get to experience different cultures and new scenery, see new sceneries and just observe how other people live their daily lives.

The noun 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' when referring to various types. 'Scenery' is uncountable, so 'new scenery' is correct; 'sceneries' is less common but acceptable when referring to different views.

× And it helps me to expand my perspective as a human being in this.

✓ And it helps me to expand my perspective as a human being in this world.

The phrase 'in this' is incomplete. Adding 'world' completes the thought.

× I have a few activities that I'm interested in.

✓ I have a few activities that I'm interested in.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I like to organize and buy my itinerary in in a detailed manner.

✓ I like to organize and buy my itinerary in a detailed manner.

The phrase contains a repeated preposition 'in in'. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× So I have specific timings, specific places that I want to visit on on each day that I'm on the holiday.

✓ So I have specific timings and specific places that I want to visit on each day that I'm on the holiday.

The phrase 'on on' is repeated. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.

× I do this because it helps me make it helps me feel.

✓ I do this because it helps me feel relaxed.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Simplifying it to 'it helps me feel relaxed' makes it clear and grammatically correct.

× I prefer a little bit of both and exciting holiday with me adventures that would make the trip memorable.

✓ I prefer a little bit of both: an exciting holiday with many adventures that would make the trip memorable.

The phrase 'me adventures' is incorrect; it should be 'many adventures'. Also, 'an exciting holiday' requires the article 'an' before a vowel sound.

× On the flip side, having a peaceful holiday helps me to feel more relaxed and when I come back I'll be I'll feel ready to go to work again.

✓ On the flip side, having a peaceful holiday helps me to feel more relaxed, and when I come back, I'll feel ready to go to work again.

The sentence has repeated 'I'll be I'll feel'. Removing the repetition and adding commas improves clarity and correctness.