假期— Part 1 评分报告

建议: حاول أن تكون إجابتك أكثر تنظيماً وطبيعية: ابدأ بجملة موضوع واضحة، قل اسم المدينة أو المكان بدقة، ثم اذكر السبب بتفصيل قصير ومنطقي دون تكرار أو تردد. استخدم عبارات ربط مثل “because” أو “so” مرة واحدة لتجنب الإطالة المكررة، واحذف الترددات مثل “uh”.

示例: I went to Riyadh, the capital of Saudi Arabia, for my last holiday because I wanted to watch the final between Al-Nassr and Al-Hilal. I'm a big fan of Cristiano Ronaldo, so attending the match was very exciting and I enjoyed the whole trip.

建议: أجب بجملة موضوع مباشرة ثم قدّم تفاصيل محددة مدعومة بربط منطقي. تجنّب التكرار والأخطاء النحوية (مثلاً “I cannot study” غير مناسبة). اذكر أنماط نشاطات محددة وعلاقات زمنية واضحة مثل “every year” أو “during holidays”.

示例: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they give me time to relax and do things I like. For example, my family usually travels to a different country every year, which lets me experience new cultures and take a break from studying.

建议: ابدأ بإجابة مباشرة ثم فسّر السبب بتفاصيل محددة ومقروءة. تجنّب الحشو والترديد، وغيّر تعابير مثل “to be honest” إذا لم تضف معنى. أذكر تقاليد محددة وكيف تؤثر عليك عاطفياً أو اجتماعياً.

示例: My favourite public holiday is Eid because it is an important family tradition. We visit relatives, exchange money and gifts, and enjoy special sweets and meals, which makes the celebration very joyful.

建议: استخدم جملة افتتاحية واضحة ثم ضع أنشطة محددة مع توضيح التكرار أو السبب. حاول الحفاظ على طول الإجابة (حتى 5 جمل) وتجنّب التلعثم. استخدم روابط مثل “also” و“because” بشكل معتدل.

示例: On holidays I usually rest and catch up on sleep, and I also play video games with my friends. Additionally, I spend more time with my family by having meals together and visiting relatives, which I really enjoy.

建议: قدّم جواباً موجزاً ثم تفاصيل محددة عن ما تقرأه أو لماذا تستمتع بالقراءة. تجنّب الترجمة الحرفية مثل “reading ignores the mind” وصِغ السبب بوضوح، واستخدم مفردات مناسبة مثل “relax” و“expand my knowledge”.

示例: Yes, I prefer spending time at home because I can relax and read. I enjoy reading novels and non-fiction books in my free time because they expand my knowledge and help me unwind.

建议: ابدأ بجملة واضحة تحدد تفضيلك ثم اشرح لماذا بأمثلة محددة. تجنّب أخطاء زمنية وتركيبية مثل “I've been very busy holiday”. اعمل على ربط الأفكار بكلمات مثل “because” و“for example”.

示例: I prefer busy holidays because I like spending time with my extended family. For example, we often have large gatherings where cousins play games, we share meals, and everyone enjoys quality time together.

建议: قدم جملة موضوع مباشرة ثم وضّح الفوائد بتفاصيل محددة. صحّح الأخطاء النحوية البسيطة (مثل “it give” → “it gives”) وتجنّب التكرار. اذكر أمثلة واضحة للأنشطة المثيرة التي تفضلها.

示例: I prefer exciting holidays because they energise me and encourage social activities. For example, we play traditional games, solve puzzles together, and share ideas, which makes the holiday lively and memorable.

× Actually, last holiday I went to the capital of Saudi Arabia.

✓ Actually, last holiday I went to the capital of Saudi Arabia.

Although the sentence uses past tense correctly ('went'), the time expression 'last holiday' is unusual; more natural phrasing: 'On my last holiday I went to Riyadh, the capital of Saudi Arabia.' Suggestion: move the time phrase to the beginning and use the city name. (Arabic: الجملة صحيحة من حيث الزمن ولكن يُفضل تحويل 'last holiday' إلى 'On my last holiday' لوضوح أفضل.)

× Uh, this is because, uh, towards the, the final between Nasser and Hilal, because I'm a big fan of Cristiano Ronaldo.

✓ This was because I went to the final between Al-Nassr and Al-Hilal, as I am a big fan of Cristiano Ronaldo.

Combine clauses and keep past tense consistent. Use 'this was because I went' or 'I went because it was the final...' Avoid repeating 'because'. (Arabic: يجب توحيد الأزمنة ودمج الجمل وتجنب تكرار 'because' ولذا صِل الفكرة بجملة واحدة واضحة.)

× So I went there to watch the final Uh, actually I enjoyed a lot.

✓ So I went there to watch the final. Actually, I enjoyed it a lot.

Use object 'it' with 'enjoy' and correct word order 'enjoyed it a lot'. Maintain punctuation. (Arabic: يجب استخدام الضمير 'it' بعد 'enjoy' وترتيب الكلمات الصحيح: 'enjoyed it a lot'.)

× Definitely yes, I like holidays because I have a lot of free time.

✓ Definitely yes, I like holidays because I have a lot of free time.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. For fluency, consider 'I definitely like holidays because they give me a lot of free time.' (Arabic: الجملة صحيحة ولكن يمكن تحسين السلاسة باستخدام 'they give me' بدلًا من 'I have'.)

× Also I cannot study so I enjoy all my time.

✓ Also, I do not study, so I enjoy all my time.

Use auxiliary 'do' for negative present simple: 'I do not study' or contraction 'I don't study'. Also add comma before 'so'. (Arabic: للنفي في المضارع البسيط نستخدم 'do not' أو 'don't' ويجب وضع فاصلة قبل 'so'.)

× This is why I like holiday.

✓ This is why I like holidays.

Use plural 'holidays' to match general statement. If referring to a specific holiday, use 'this holiday'. (Arabic: للتعبير العام نستخدم جمع 'holidays'، أما إذا كان حديثًا عن عطلة معينة نستخدم 'this holiday'.)

× Also my family every holiday we traveled out in different countries.

✓ Also, every holiday my family and I travel to different countries.

Use present simple for habitual actions: 'we travel'. Correct word order: subject before verb; use 'travel to' not 'traveled out in'. (Arabic: للتعبير عن عادة نستخدم المضارع البسيط 'travel' ويجب ترتيب الجملة بشكل صحيح واستخدام 'travel to'.)

× Actually, to be honest with you, the Eid holiday because, uh, it's part for, for our tradition to celebrate on Eid and, uh, we, uh, gift each other some monies and, uh, toys and also chocolate, uh, we enjoyed a lot, uh, because.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the Eid holiday because it is part of our tradition to celebrate; we give each other money, toys, and chocolate, and we enjoy it a lot.

Complete the sentence by providing a main verb ('I prefer') and use present simple for habitual/traditional actions. Use 'give' not 'gift' in informal context; use 'money' (uncountable) not 'monies'. Remove filler words. (Arabic: اكمل الجملة بفعل رئيسي واستخدم المضارع البسيط للعادات، واستخدم 'money' بدلاً من 'monies' و'give' بدلاً من 'gift'.)

× To be honest with you, I sleep a lot and have a long rest.

✓ To be honest, I sleep a lot and have a long rest.

Sentence is acceptable. For consistency, 'have a long rest' is fine; can also say 'get a long rest' or 'rest for a long time'. (Arabic: الجملة صحيحة ولكن يمكن تحسينها بعبارة بديلة مثل 'rest for a long time'.)

× Also, uh, I played video games with my, uh, friends.

✓ Also, I play video games with my friends.

If describing habitual holiday activity use present simple 'I play'. If referring to a specific past holiday use 'I played'. Choose tense to match context. (Arabic: إن كانت عادة استخدم المضارع 'play'، وإن كانت إشارة لمرة سابقة فالماضي 'played' صحيح.)

× Uh, uh, I gathered with my family and spending more time with them.

✓ I gather with my family and spend more time with them.

Keep parallel verbs in present simple: 'gather' and 'spend' or use past: 'I gathered... and spent...'. Do not mix 'gathered' with 'spending'. (Arabic: حافظ على تناسق الأزمنة والأفعال المتوازية، لا تخلط بين 'gathered' و'spending'.)

× Actually yes, I prefer spending time on home because I can have a long rest.

✓ Actually, yes, I prefer spending time at home because I can have a long rest.

Use preposition 'at' with 'home'. 'On home' is incorrect. (Arabic: حرف الجر الصحيح مع 'home' هو 'at' وليس 'on'.)

× Also I enjoy reading so in my free time I enjoy reading because reading ignores the mind and expand our knowledge so I enjoy reading to have.

✓ Also, I enjoy reading, so in my free time I read because reading relaxes the mind and expands our knowledge.

Use verbs that make sense: 'relax' not 'ignore' the mind. Maintain subject-verb agreement 'reading expands'. Avoid unfinished clause 'to have'. (Arabic: استخدم أفعالًا مناسبة مثل 'relaxes' و'expands' وتأكد من تطابق الفاعل والفعل ولا تترك الجملة غير مكتملة.)

× Actually, I've been very busy holiday because, uh, I like spending time with all my family gathering together and have a a quality time also with my cousins and my younger brothers when they play in front of me, I love to see them and.

✓ Actually, I have very busy holidays because I like spending time with my extended family, gathering together and having quality time with my cousins and younger brothers; when they play I love to watch them.

Use plural 'holidays' for habitual events. Use present simple for habits. Combine clauses, correct gerunds 'having', and complete the sentence. (Arabic: استخدم صيغة الجمع للعطلات إذا كانت عادة، واستخدم 'having' واملأ نهاية الجملة لتكون كاملة.)

× For me I prefer exciting holidays because it give us energy and we can play play a lot.

✓ For me, I prefer exciting holidays because they give us energy and we can play a lot.

Subject-verb agreement: 'holidays' plural -> 'they give'. Remove repeated word 'play'. (Arabic: توافق الفاعل والفعل: 'holidays' جمع لذلك 'they give' ويجب إزالة التكرار 'play play'.)

× It make us gathering and share different ideas and play puzzles and some tradition games that help us.

✓ They make us gather, share different ideas, play puzzles, and enjoy traditional games that help us.

Match plural subject 'they' with verb 'make' -> 'They make us gather'. Use base form after 'make' and parallel verbs. Use 'traditional' adjective. (Arabic: اجعل الأفعال متوازية بعد 'make' واستخدم 'traditional' بدلاً من 'tradition'.)