植物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态使用不准确，应该用现在时描述习惯行为；回答中有重复词汇和语气词，影响流畅性；建议简洁表达，避免多余的填充词。

示例: Yes, I keep some green plants on my balcony and beside my desk. Taking care of them is very relaxing, and I feel a sense of accomplishment when they bear fruit.

建议: 时态错误，应该用过去时；句子结构不够自然，表达不够连贯；建议使用连接词使回答更流畅。

示例: When I was young, I grew small tomatoes as part of my school homework. I received tomato seeds and had to record their growth regularly.

建议: 词汇使用错误（expertise应为expert，plant swim应为plant science）；语法错误较多，表达不清晰；建议使用正确词汇并简洁表达。

示例: Yes, I am somewhat of an expert because I am studying plant science as a postgraduate. To help plants grow well, you should focus on sunlight, fertilizer, and watering.

建议: 表达不清晰，语法和词汇错误较多；建议理清句子结构，使用恰当词汇表达观点。

示例: Yes, Chinese people often send plants as gifts when someone moves into a new home. They believe plants can decorate the house and symbolize new life and good luck.

× Yes, I kept some green plants on the balcony and besides my desk, uh, I feel it's very relaxing to take care of them and uh, when I get some fruits I will feel a sense of accomplishment.

✓ Yes, I keep some green plants on the balcony and beside my desk. I feel it's very relaxing to take care of them, and when I get some fruits, I feel a sense of accomplishment.

这里学生使用了过去时态“kept”，但根据上下文，学生现在仍然养植物，应该使用一般现在时“keep”。此外，“besides my desk”应改为“beside my desk”，因为“beside”表示位置，“besides”表示“除了”。

× I grow some small tomatoes when I was young.

✓ I grew some small tomatoes when I was young.

句子描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去式“grew”而不是现在式“grow”。

× It's one of the schools homework.

✓ It's one of the school's homework assignments.

“schools”应为所有格“school's”，表示“学校的”。此外，“homework”是不可数名词，前面不加复数形式，应改为“homework assignments”更合适。

× I received some tomato seeds and I needed to record the growth of the tomato.

✓ I received some tomato seeds and needed to record the growth of the tomato.

两个动作发生在过去，第二个动作“needed”可以省略主语“I”，使句子更简洁。

× Yes, actually maybe I am a expertise because I'm studying plant swim as a post graduate.

✓ Yes, actually maybe I am an expert because I'm studying plant science as a postgraduate.

“a expertise”错误，应该用名词“expert”且前面用不定冠词“an”。“plant swim”应为“plant science”。“post graduate”应合并为“postgraduate”。

× I think you if you want a plant grow well you should focus on the sunlight, the fertilizer and the water giving.

✓ I think if you want a plant to grow well, you should focus on sunlight, fertilizer, and watering.

“want a plant grow”缺少不定式“to”，应为“want a plant to grow”。“the sunlight”改为“sunlight”更自然。“the fertilizer”改为“fertilizer”。“the water giving”表达不当，应改为“watering”。

× Yes, we usually send plants to umm people who room to a room new room and they think the plants will decorate their home and give some umm symbolize as a new life and a good luck.

✓ Yes, we usually send plants to people who move into a new room, and they think the plants will decorate their home and symbolize new life and good luck.

“people who room to a room new room”表达错误，应为“people who move into a new room”。“give some umm symbolize”表达不当，应改为“symbolize”。“a good luck”中“luck”是不可数名词，不加冠词。