礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Also, clarify your meaning by using correct expressions, for example, 'I consider the personality and characteristics of the person' instead of 'for the clothes, uh, persons'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I consider myself good at giving gifts because I always think about the personality and preferences of the person. This helps me choose presents that truly flatter and suit them.

建议: Avoid excessive filler words and try to be more specific and clear. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce examples. Also, correct phrases such as 'as his presence' to 'as a present'.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions because I like to put a lot of effort into choosing them. For example, I once bought a beautiful starry sky picture as a present for my friend's birthday.

建议: Try to organize your answer more clearly with linking words like 'first' and 'however'. Avoid vague phrases like 'someone who's not so around' and be more specific. Also, expand your answer slightly to explain why you choose books.

示例: First, I consider how close I am to the person. If we are very close, I choose a more special gift. However, if we are not so close, I usually give books because they are thoughtful and suitable for many people.

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to complete your sentences and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' properly. Also, directly answer the question by stating whether you have given handmade gifts or not.

示例: I think handmade gifts are very special because they show the artist's effort and creativity. However, I have not given many handmade gifts because they can be expensive and I usually cannot afford them.

建议: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Make your answer clear and complete by finishing your thoughts. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to explain your opinion clearly.

示例: I believe that the cost of a gift is less important than the personal touch it has. For example, a handmade gift that reflects the recipient's feelings is much more valuable than an expensive but impersonal present.

× I think myself as a person who gives a lot of good gifts because I usually, uh, buy gifts, uh, for the clothes, uh, persons in my life.

✓ I think of myself as a person who gives a lot of good gifts because I usually buy gifts for the people in my life.

The phrase 'I think myself as' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I think of myself as'. Also, 'the clothes persons' is incorrect; it should be 'the people'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× And I always consider the personality and the characteristic of the person I'm buying a gift and that flatters them.

✓ And I always consider the personality and the characteristics of the person I'm buying a gift for, and I choose something that flatters them.

The word 'characteristic' should be plural 'characteristics' to match 'personality'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and unclear; adding 'for' after 'gift' and clarifying the action improves grammatical correctness and clarity.

× I bought, uh, a nice star view, uh, picture for my friend as his presence for the his birthday.

✓ I bought a nice star view picture for my friend as his present for his birthday.

The word 'presence' is incorrect; it should be 'present' when referring to a gift. Also, 'the his birthday' is redundant; 'his birthday' is correct. These corrections fix pronoun and word choice errors.

× First of all, I think about how close we are and if you're so close to each other and spend a lot of time together, I think of something that is more special.

✓ First of all, I think about how close we are, and if we are very close and spend a lot of time together, I think of something that is more special.

The use of 'you're' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'we are' to maintain consistency in the subject. This correction ensures subject agreement and clarity.

× And it's usually harder when someone is not so close for someone who's not so around.

✓ And it's usually harder when someone is not very close or not often around.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Rephrasing it to 'not very close or not often around' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Well, I believe handmade gifts are a very special and because they are the pure art of a person who is an artist or a sculptor for example.

✓ Well, I believe handmade gifts are very special because they are the pure art of a person who is an artist or a sculptor, for example.

The phrase 'are a very special' is incorrect; 'are very special' is correct. Also, removing 'and' improves sentence flow. These corrections fix adjective use and sentence structure.

× But I think those are very expensive for the gift and I usually cannot afford them, but they are very good.

✓ But I think those gifts are very expensive, and I usually cannot afford them, although they are very good.

The phrase 'expensive for the gift' is incorrect; it should be 'expensive' or 'expensive gifts'. Also, connecting the clauses properly improves sentence coherence.

× Uh, I believe that, uh, the expenditure on the gift is not as important as the personal touch it contains. Uh, for example, if I give someone a handmade gift, which, uh, conclude which includes him or her feelings is much valuable than just.

✓ Uh, I believe that the expenditure on the gift is not as important as the personal touch it contains. For example, if I give someone a handmade gift, which includes his or her feelings, it is much more valuable than just an expensive gift.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains incorrect pronoun use and awkward phrasing. Correcting 'conclude which includes him or her feelings' to 'which includes his or her feelings' and completing the comparison improves clarity and grammatical correctness.