礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用简单句连接原因。

示例: No, I'm not good at giving gifts because I often don't know what people want. Also, I find it hard to choose a suitable present.

建议: 回答不连贯，信息表达不清晰。建议用简洁的句子说明送礼时间，并举例说明。

示例: I usually give gifts when I receive my salary. For example, last Mother's Day, I bought a necklace for my mother with my own money.

建议: 表达有些混乱，句子不完整。建议先明确主题句，再用连词补充具体考虑因素。

示例: When choosing a gift, I consider if it suits the person. Because a gift should show appreciation and also make the receiver happy.

建议: 句子结构不完整，表达不流畅。建议用简单句描述手工礼物的内容和制作过程。

示例: Yes, I once made a handmade flower for my boyfriend using string. It took me a lot of time to make it.

建议: 表达较为清晰，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意冠词使用和句子简洁。

示例: Yes, I think expensive gifts can better express my feelings because I find it hard to say how I feel. Buying a nice gift shows my appreciation and love.

× No I'm not. I'm totally not a person who are good who is good at giving gifts.

✓ No, I'm not. I'm totally not a person who is good at giving gifts.

这里的主语是单数的"person"，所以关系代词后面的动词应该用第三人称单数形式"is"，而不是复数形式"are"。

× I cannot guess what the people want to receive and also I don't know how to buy the gift that is major hobby.

✓ I cannot guess what people want to receive and also I don't know how to buy gifts; it is not my major hobby.

"the people"在这里不需要定冠词，直接用"people"即可；"the gift that is major hobby"结构不清晰，应该表达"买礼物不是我的主要爱好"，需要调整句子结构。

× It is a time that I get my own salary and I can remember that the last time when it is about Mother's Day and there is a first time I have my own salary and my and I got a necklace for my.

✓ It was the time I got my own salary, and I remember that the last time was around Mother's Day. It was the first time I had my own salary, and I got a necklace for my mother.

句子中时态混乱，"It is a time"应改为过去时"It was the time"；"there is a first time"表达不正确，应改为"It was the first time"；句子结构混乱，需要分句并补充缺失的词语。

× I will consider what if these things match the person that I want to give because I think the gift is not only to express your appreciation but also you need to make them happy and they will live to.

✓ I will consider whether these things match the person I want to give them to because I think a gift is not only to express your appreciation but also to make them happy, and they will love it.

"what if"用法不当，应改为"whether"；"the person that I want to give"缺少介词，应为"the person I want to give them to"；"they will live to"应为"they will love it"，表达错误。

× Yes, I have given a handmade flower for my boyfriend which is using the string and the line to make it, which costs a lot of time for of me of myself and.

✓ Yes, I have given a handmade flower to my boyfriend, which I made using string and wire, and it took a lot of my time.

"given a handmade flower for my boyfriend"应为"given ... to my boyfriend"；"which is using the string and the line to make it"结构不正确，应改为"which I made using string and wire"；"costs a lot of time for of me of myself"表达混乱，应改为"took a lot of my time"。

× Yeah, absolutely, because I'm the person who is not good at telling my thoughts and my thinking. So I would like to buy a expensive gifts to express how I appreciate someone and how I love someone.

✓ Yeah, absolutely, because I'm a person who is not good at expressing my thoughts. So I would like to buy expensive gifts to express how much I appreciate and love someone.

"a expensive gifts"中"a"与复数名词"gifts"不匹配，应去掉"a"；"telling my thoughts and my thinking"表达重复且不自然，改为"expressing my thoughts"更合适。