礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Улучшите точность и естественность выражения. Избегайте грамматических ошибок (we're → I’m/we; I have a very good flavor → I have a good sense of taste/style) и непонятных фраз (I usually get → I usually give). Дайте одно чёткое утверждение, затем краткое объяснение. Не используйте лишние слова.

示例: Yes, I think I’m good at giving gifts because I have a good sense of people’s tastes. For example, I usually choose unique items that match the recipient’s hobbies.

建议: Исправьте неверные словосочетания и детали времени (two hours → on holidays; dates должны быть ясными). Дайте краткий ответ с примерами и связкой. Уберите повторения и общие фразы типа "I need to".

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as New Year, International Women's Day (March 8) and the start of the school year (September 1). These holidays are important in my culture, so I celebrate them with family and friends.

建议: Устраните ошибки в словах (president → present) и завершайте мысли полно. Начните с прямого ответа (I consider...), затем добавьте конкретные факторы и пример. Используйте связки для логики.

示例: I consider the recipient’s tastes and personality first. For instance, if someone loves cooking I might choose a high-quality knife, while for a reader I would pick a bestselling novel.

建议: Сделайте фразу более точной и хронологически понятной ("then it was a child" непонятно). Укажите конкретный пример того, что вы делали вручную, и затем объясните причину смены на покупные подарки. Старайтесь не превышать 3–4 предложений.

示例: Yes, I have. When I was a child I used to make handmade cards and small crafts for my parents. Nowadays I usually buy gifts because I can find better quality items in shops.

建议: Упростите структуру и исправьте грамматику. Дайте чёткое мнение, затем причину с примером. Избегайте фрагментов и повторов. Используйте связки (However, For example).

示例: I don’t think expensive gifts are necessary to express feelings. However, they can show affection, but thoughtful or handmade presents often mean more. For example, a carefully chosen book related to someone’s hobby can feel more personal than an expensive gadget.

× Yes, actually, I think we're really good at giving gifts because I have a very good flavor and I usually get extraordinary presents.

✓ Yes, actually, I think I'm really good at giving gifts because I have very good taste and I usually give extraordinary presents.

The sentence uses 'we're' which incorrectly refers to the speaker alone; this is a pronoun error. 'We' should be 'I'. 'Flavor' is the wrong word; use 'taste' for aesthetic preference. 'I usually get extraordinary presents' contradicts the meaning of being good at giving gifts; change to 'I usually give extraordinary presents'. Suggestion: use the correct pronoun matching the subject, choose appropriate vocabulary (taste), and ensure verbs reflect intended meaning.

× I usually give gifts two hours on holidays.

✓ I usually give gifts a few hours before holiday celebrations.

The original uses an incorrect preposition and time expression ('two hours on holidays') which is unclear. Use 'before' to indicate timing relative to an event and a clearer time phrase like 'a few hours before holiday celebrations'.

× For example, we always celebrate New Year 8th of March, 1st of September.

✓ For example, we always celebrate New Year, International Women's Day on the 8th of March, and Knowledge Day on the 1st of September.

The sentence lists items without proper punctuation or conjunctions and mixes event names. Improve structure by separating items with commas and using conjunctions, and clarify each holiday name with its date.

× In my opinion it's really important events and I need to celebrate them with my family and friends.

✓ In my opinion, these are really important events, and I need to celebrate them with my family and friends.

The sentence lacks a clear subject for 'important events'; use 'these' to refer back to the mentioned holidays. Add commas for clarity and correct connector 'and'.

× And actually I need to give gifts for people.

✓ And actually I need to give gifts to people.

Use 'give something to someone' rather than 'give something for someone'. The preposition 'to' is correct for the indirect object.

× Of course, at first I consider the tastes and the personality for whom I buy this president.

✓ Of course, first I consider the tastes and personality of the person for whom I buy this present.

Several issues: 'at first' is better as 'first' in this context. 'Personality for whom I buy this president' uses wrong word order and 'president' is a typo for 'present'. Use 'the person for whom I buy this present' or simpler 'the person I'm buying this present for'.

× In my opinion, it's really important to understand people's tastes.

✓ In my opinion, it's really important to understand people's tastes.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included here only to acknowledge correctness per instructions.

× So I usually like to buy extraordinary and. Known.

✓ So I usually like to buy extraordinary and well-known items.

Original sentence is fragmented and has a period breaking the phrase. Combine into a single phrase 'extraordinary and well-known items' to complete the thought.

× Yes, actually, then it was a child.

✓ Yes, actually, that was when I was a child.

The phrase 'then it was a child' is ungrammatical. Use past time clause 'that was when I was a child' to indicate the time when the speaker gave handmade gifts.

× I often give handmade presents for my parents and relatives, but now I prefer to buy gifts in a shop.

✓ I often give handmade presents to my parents and relatives, but now I prefer to buy gifts in a shop.

Use 'give something to someone' not 'for'. 'In a shop' is acceptable; alternatively 'at a shop' or 'in stores'.

× In my opinion, it isn't very necessary.

✓ In my opinion, it's not really necessary.

Grammatically acceptable but 'not really necessary' is a more natural phrasing than 'isn't very necessary'. Adjust word choice for naturalness.

× While expensive gifts can signal strong affection because we often require significant resources through emotional expression depends more on thoughtfulness and appropriateness.

✓ While expensive gifts can signal strong affection because they often require significant resources, emotional expression depends more on thoughtfulness and appropriateness.

Original sentence is run-on and confusing. Separate into two clauses: one about expensive gifts and another stating that emotional expression depends on thoughtfulness. Correct subject 'they' for 'expensive gifts' and place commas to separate ideas.

× For instance, A handmade present or a carefully chosen item. What reflects the precepts interests can convey deeper understanding.

✓ For instance, a handmade present or a carefully chosen item that reflects the recipient's interests can convey deeper understanding.

The original is fragmented and has incorrect word choices ('precepts' should be 'recipient's'). Combine fragments into one sentence, use lowercase 'a' after comma, and use the possessive form 'recipient's interests'.