礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and communicates the idea, but it is slightly informal and has minor grammar issues. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and one brief supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if adding more information.

示例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts. I enjoy choosing thoughtful presents for people I care about, and I try to match the gift to their personality or interests.

建议: Your answer includes relevant cultural detail and specifics, but the sentence is long and slightly repetitive. Break it into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details, using linking words to improve flow.

示例: I usually give gifts on birthdays and special anniversaries. In Mongolia, we also give presents during the Lunar New Year, and we often choose items based on the recipient’s age and interests.

建议: Your answer mentions relevant points but is hesitant and repetitive. Reduce fillers, use a clear topic sentence, and provide one precise example to show decision-making. Use a linking word to add the second reason.

示例: I mainly consider the person’s hobbies when choosing a gift. Also, sometimes I pick something I like myself if I think they will appreciate it too.

建议: The idea is good but the reply is unclear and contains many hesitations. Give a concise topic sentence, then one clear supporting detail describing what you made and why it was special. Avoid fillers and correct unclear words.

示例: Yes. When I was a child I made a small embroidered handkerchief for my mother’s birthday. She treasured it because I had spent a lot of time sewing it by hand.

建议: The answer tries to express preference but is confusing and contains errors. State a clear opinion in the topic sentence, then briefly explain and give an example. Use linking words to contrast ideas.

示例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts are necessary to show feelings. I prefer thoughtful or personal presents because they show the giver knows me, although I would still appreciate an expensive gift from close family.

× Oh yeah, I'm really good at giving something special for people that I have an affection.

✓ Oh yeah, I'm really good at giving something special to people I care about.

The original uses an incorrect relative clause 'people that I have an affection.' Use the correct verb phrase 'care about' and the preposition 'to' after 'giving' when indicating recipients. Also simplify the clause to sound natural. (English (Mongolia))

× When it's someone's birthday or special anniversary or in Mongolia, we are used to give gifts during the Lunar New Year and we prepare gifts for the people depending on their age and interest and hobby, whether it's a female or male.

✓ When it's someone's birthday or a special anniversary, or in Mongolia during the Lunar New Year, we give gifts and prepare them according to the person's age, interests, and hobbies, and whether they are female or male.

Several issues: missing article before 'special anniversary' and incorrect 'we are used to give' — after 'used to' use the gerund form 'giving' or simply use 'we give'. 'During the Lunar New Year' should be placed correctly. Use plural 'interests' and 'hobbies', and use 'they are female or male' instead of 'whether it's a female or male' to correctly refer to people. (English (Mongolia))

× Usually I consider, uh, the hobby of the person to whom I would like to give a gift or present.

✓ Usually I consider the person's hobbies when deciding what gift to give.

The original is grammatically awkward: 'consider the hobby of the person to whom I would like to give a gift' is wordy. Use 'consider the person's hobbies' and a clearer verb phrase 'when deciding what gift to give'. Also use plural 'hobbies' for usual variety. (English (Mongolia))

× And also sometimes I choose the thing that I would like to have by myself.

✓ Also sometimes I choose something I would like to have myself.

'The thing that I would like to have by myself' is unnatural. Use 'something I would like to have myself.' Remove unnecessary 'by'. (English (Mongolia))

× So I think that's, uh, yeah, if I would like to, I like this thing.

✓ So I think that if I like something, I would choose it.

The sentence mixes conditional forms and awkward repetition. Restructure to a clear conditional: 'if I like something, I would choose it.' This maintains tense consistency and meaning. (English (Mongolia))

× Yes, uh, when I was a child I gave my mother for her birthday, umm, my wedding.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I gave my mother a handmade gift for her birthday.

Original is confusing: 'gave my mother for her birthday, umm, my wedding' is unclear and incorrect word order. Clarify intention: 'gave my mother a handmade gift for her birthday.' Keep past tense 'gave'. (English (Mongolia))

× Uh, the head that uh, I waved.

✓ It was a headband that I made.

The original fragment 'the head that I waved' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended to say 'headband that I made.' Use a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'It was a headband that I made.' (English (Mongolia))

× So it was my first handmade present to umm, someone.

✓ So it was my first handmade present to someone.

Remove hesitation markers and ensure straightforward structure. The sentence is otherwise acceptable after removing filler sounds. (English (Mongolia))

× No, I do not prefer.

✓ No, I don't think expensive gifts are better at expressing feelings.

'I do not prefer' is incomplete and does not address the question. Provide a complete idea: 'I don't think expensive gifts are better at expressing feelings.' This corrects sentence structure and answers the question. (English (Mongolia))

× I like call my clinks, but expensive.

✓ I like simple gifts, not expensive ones.

Original is unclear and contains nonwords 'call my clinks.' Interpret likely meaning as preferring simple gifts. Use clear nouns: 'simple gifts' and contrast with 'expensive ones.' (English (Mongolia))

× I would appreciate expensive gifts from my family or my friends, but not from strangers.

✓ I would appreciate expensive gifts from my family or friends, but not from strangers.

Sentence is mostly correct; remove redundant 'my' before 'friends' for natural English. Preposition use is fine. (English (Mongolia))