礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 内容较清楚但表达有语法和用词错误，句子较长且有重复。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和数的一致，去掉多余词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。练习将回答控制在3-4句内，第一句直接回答，然后给出具体例子并说明原因。

示例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I pay attention to people's interests and preferences. For example, for my best friend's birthday I bought her a new phone because she had wanted one for a long time, and she was really happy with it.

建议: 回答内容完整但存在时态混用与重复。建议使用一致的现在时，避免重复信息，使用连接词（for example, also）使逻辑更清晰，并提供更具体的细节如准备礼物的方式或时间。控制长度在3-4句。

示例: I usually give presents during traditional festivals such as the Spring Festival and the Dragon Boat Festival, and also on personal occasions like birthdays. For example, I always prepare a small gift for my friends' birthdays and a special present for my mother at the Spring Festival.

建议: 表达含糊且有多处语言错误（如“I'm not very worth”）。建议先给出明确主题句（I consider the price and the recipient's taste），然后用逻辑连接词解释原因并提供具体例子。注意使用正确的形容词和时态。

示例: I usually consider both the recipient's taste and the price. Because I have a limited budget, I choose something affordable but meaningful. For instance, when a gift I liked was too expensive, I picked a cheaper but more thoughtful alternative.

建议: 总体表达不错，内容具体且有例子，但有重复（She loved it重复出现）。建议删掉多余句子，使用连接词增强流畅性，并把句子控制在3-4句内。注意时态一致性。

示例: Yes, I often give handmade gifts because they feel more personal. Last week I made a scrapbook for a friend's birthday that included photos and handwritten notes, and she really appreciated it.

建议: 回答观点正确但表达混乱，有大量语法和词汇错误（perform, high call, another people）。建议先用一句话给出总体观点（It depends on the person），接着用两个清晰的对比句说明不同人的喜好，注意句子简短并使用比较或对比连接词（for one...; on the other hand...）。

示例: It depends on the person. For some people, expensive gifts show care because they value quality, while others prefer meaningful items like a handmade card that show thoughtfulness.

× I always pay attention to small details of about people's interest.

✓ I always pay attention to small details about people's interests.

原句中“of about”重复且多余，且“interest”应为复数形式“interests”以匹配泛指多个人的兴趣。建议去掉“of”，并将“interest”改为复数。

× For example, a last time of my best friend's birthday, I buy a hand handphone for her and she loved it very much because she wanted to buy it for a long time.

✓ For example, at my best friend's last birthday, I bought a handset for her and she loved it very much because she had wanted to buy it for a long time.

句子时间点为过去，应使用过去时。原句使用了现在时“buy”，应改为过去式“bought”；另外说明想买很久的动作在过去發生，应用过去完成时“had wanted”。“a last time of my best friend's birthday”结构不自然，改为“at my best friend's last birthday”。“hand handphone”重复，改为“handset”或“mobile phone”。

× I usually give a present during traditional festivals such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival, and Thanksgiving.

✓ I usually give presents during traditional festivals such as the Spring Festival, the Dragon Boat Festival, and Thanksgiving.

表示习惯性动作用一般现在时是正确，但“a present”与“usually”搭配不自然，应使用复数“presents”或去掉冠词以表示经常性多次行为。建议用复数形式。

× I also gave gifts on special personal occasions like birthdays.

✓ I also give gifts on special personal occasions like birthdays.

上下文在描述习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时“gave”。将过去时改为现在时“give”。

× For example, I always buy a present for my friends on their birthday and have a nice gift for my mother and the Spring Festival.

✓ For example, I always buy presents for my friends on their birthdays and give a nice gift to my mother for the Spring Festival.

原句结构混乱，动词短语搭配不当。将“have a nice gift for my mother and the Spring Festival”改为“give a nice gift to my mother for the Spring Festival”，使句子清晰并保持时态一致。此外“friends on their birthday”改为“friends on their birthdays”。

× It must be the price because I'm not very worth so I need to consider the range of the price.

✓ Price is important because I'm not very wealthy, so I need to consider the price range.

原句“I'm not very worth”用词错误，应为“I'm not very wealthy”或“I can't afford expensive things”。“It must be the price”不自然，改为“Price is important”。“range of the price”顺序不当，改为“price range”。

× For example, last time I choose a gift for my friend but it was too expensive so I choose another one.

✓ For example, last time I chose a gift for my friend but it was too expensive so I chose another one.

描述过去发生的具体事件，应使用过去时。将动词“choose”改为过去式“chose”。

× It's cheaper but I think it's more meaningful.

✓ It was cheaper, but I thought it was more meaningful.

此句接续上文在讲过去发生的选择，需保持过去时态。将现在时改为过去时以保持时态一致。

× Yeah, quite often I think a handmade gift is more meaningful than a store bought one.

✓ Yeah, quite often I think a handmade gift is more meaningful than a store-bought one.

句子时态和结构基本正确，但“store bought”应以连字符连成“store-bought”作为复合形容词。

× For example, last week I made a small scrapbook for a friend to celebrate her birthday and she loved it because it includes photos and handwriting notes.

✓ For example, last week I made a small scrapbook for a friend to celebrate her birthday and she loved it because it included photos and handwritten notes.

句子描述过去事件，应全部用过去时；“includes”改为“included”。“handwriting notes”用词不当，改为“handwritten notes”。

× She loved it.

✓ She loved it.

原句语法正确，动词和主语一致，无需修改。保留原句。

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

这是一个正确的疑问句，结构和时态都合适，无需修改。保留原句。

× Well, it depends because different people have different perform, you know a friend for example, a friend of mine, she loves some very expensive things because she thinks the high call they are high quality.

✓ Well, it depends, because different people have different preferences. For example, a friend of mine loves very expensive things because she thinks they are of high quality.

原句“different perform”词不当，应为“different preferences”。句子冗长且有语序问题，“the high call they are high quality”完全错误，应改为“she thinks they are of high quality”。分成两句更清晰。

× But another people of mine she prefer some very meaningful things, meaningful things such as handmade card, so.

✓ But another friend of mine prefers very meaningful things, such as handmade cards.

“another people of mine”错误，应该是“another friend of mine”。主谓一致问题，“she prefer”应为“she prefers”。“handmade card”应为复数或加冠词，改为“handmade cards”。末尾的“so”多余且不完整，应删除。