礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Améliorez la clarté et la structure: commencez par une phrase directe répondant à la question, puis ajoutez une ou deux phrases de soutien. Corrigez la grammaire et le vocabulaire (par ex. "I don't think I'm good at giving personal gifts"). Évitez les répétitions et organisez les idées logiquement en utilisant des connecteurs simples comme "because" ou "but".

示例: I'm not particularly good at giving personal gifts. I tend to be stubborn and usually choose simple, common presents for friends' birthdays because I prefer practical items rather than elaborate surprises.

建议: Rendez la réponse plus concise et structurée: commencez par répondre directement ("I usually give gifts on..."), puis ajoutez un ou deux détails spécifiques. Utilisez des mots précis pour les objets et évitez les hésitations et répétitions.

示例: I usually give gifts at my friends' birthday parties. For example, I often bring a birthday cake and a small present, such as a meaningful book or a candle.

建议: Clarifiez l'idée principale et développez-la avec une raison claire. Evitez les hésitations et les phrases incohérentes. Par exemple, dites d'abord que le budget est important, puis expliquez pourquoi et mentionnez d'autres facteurs (goûts, relation). Utilisez des connecteurs comme "because" et "also".

示例: When choosing a gift, my main consideration is the budget because I need to be realistic about what I can afford. I also think about the recipient's interests and our relationship so the gift feels appropriate.

建议: Structurez la réponse et fournissez un exemple clair et concis. Commencez par oui/non, puis racontez brièvement l'occasion avec des détails spécifiques (où, what you bought or made). Evitez les répétitions et les erreurs de temps/verbe.

示例: Yes, I have. Last month in Prague I bought a small handmade souvenir from a local shop and gave it to a friend. The idea just popped into my mind when I saw it, and she appreciated the personal touch.

建议: Exprimez votre opinion clairement au début ("No, I don't think so") puis donnez des exemples concrets pour soutenir votre point. Corrigez la grammaire et la concordance des temps. Utilisez des connecteurs comme "for example" et "instead".

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. For example, my father gave me a meaningful history book for my 13th birthday, and that felt more special than an expensive present.

× Personally I don't think I'm a person who like give some personal gift and a good thought good thinking gift because I'm a little bit stubborn person and every time when my friends have their birthday never give her just a common gift.

✓ Personally, I don't think I'm the kind of person who likes to give simple or thoughtless gifts because I'm a bit stubborn and never give my friends just a common gift on their birthdays.

The sentence contains several pronoun and agreement issues: 'a person who like' should be 'a person who likes' to match the singular subject (third person singular). 'Give some personal gift and a good thought good thinking gift' is unclear; replace with 'likes to give simple or thoughtless gifts' or its opposite depending on meaning. 'Every time when my friends have their birthday never give her' is incorrect pronoun use and word order; use 'never give my friends just a common gift on their birthdays'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into clear clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use consistent pronouns (my friends/their birthdays).

× Well, as I've just said, you know during my my friend's birthday party and I just went by to their house and give them the common gift like the birthday cake, a birthday candle and a meaningful book extra.

✓ Well, as I've just said, during my friend's birthday party I usually go to their house and give them common gifts like a birthday cake, candles, and a meaningful book.

Tense and aspect are mixed: 'I just went by' (past) conflicts with habitual 'during my friend's birthday party' which requires present simple or present habitual 'I usually go'. 'Give' should be 'give them' but in the habitual sense 'give them common gifts' is correct. Also correct plural nouns (candles) and word order. Suggestion: choose the intended time frame (habitual present) and keep verbs consistent; use plural forms for countable items when appropriate.

× Well, who honestly, uh, when I, when I am choosing the gift, the most important thing is the money. And you know, sometimes we'll say it is substantial. It is not that important. Well, I think the lies because, you know, the, we need to pay attention to the money. That's the first time.

✓ Honestly, when I am choosing a gift, the most important thing is the price. Sometimes people say money is not that important, but I think that is not true because we need to pay attention to the cost; that's my first consideration.

Pronoun and phrasing errors: 'the money' is awkward; 'price' or 'cost' fits better. 'We'll say it is substantial' is incorrect pronoun and modal use; 'people say' is clearer. 'I think the lies' is ungrammatical; use 'I think that is not true'. 'That's the first time' is wrong here; use 'that's my first consideration'. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with nouns, avoid literal translations, and use clear connectors.

× Well, handmade gift that really depends. For example, the last time I gave they had me to my friend is last month when I was in Prague, you know, in the Republic of Czech and I go there to to just swim by some souvenir shops and you know, some idea just pop it pop out to my mind. Why not?

✓ Handmade gifts really depend on the situation. For example, the last gift I gave my friend was last month when I was in Prague, Czech Republic; I went to some souvenir shops and an idea just popped into my mind: why not?

This passage has sentence structure and tense errors: 'handmade gift that really depends' should be 'handmade gifts really depend on the situation'. 'I gave they had me to my friend' is ungrammatical—should be 'I gave my friend'. Use past simple for past events: 'was last month' and 'I went' and 'an idea popped into my mind'. 'Republic of Czech' should be 'Czech Republic'. Suggestion: reorder clauses, use correct subject-object order, and consistent past tense for past events.

× And not really sometime the expensive gift just give you some substantial feelings. You know, some people really like some meaningful gifts, like my father give me a meaningful historical books when I was 13 years old, old birthday. You know, sometimes we don't need to keep some expensive gifts.

✓ Not really. Sometimes an expensive gift can give a strong impression, but many people prefer meaningful gifts. For example, my father gave me a meaningful history book for my 13th birthday. Sometimes we don't need expensive gifts.

Errors include verb tense and noun number: 'the expensive gift just give' should be 'an expensive gift can give' (modal/ability) and 'give' needs subject-verb agreement with singular subject. 'My father give me' should be past tense 'my father gave me'. 'A meaningful historical books' mixes singular and plural; use 'a meaningful history book'. '13 years old, old birthday' is redundant and incorrect; use 'for my 13th birthday'. Suggestion: use correct past tense for past events, correct singular/plural agreement, and idiomatic phrases like '13th birthday'.