礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答自然且直接，但有语法和用词不准（如“that reminds us of some significant movement”应为“that reminds us of some special moments”）。句子有点冗长，信息可更具体（如照片主题、反应）。建议注意名词复数、搭配以及用更地道的短语；控制在最多五句内并用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. I usually choose something personal that reflects shared memories. For example, last month I made a homemade photo album for my younger sister Amy, filled with pictures from our family trips, and she was very touched.

建议: 回答直接但有语法问题（如“I really give”不自然，应为“I usually give”；“to wish them have a good fortune”应为“to wish them good fortune and happiness”）。内容可以更具体说明准备礼物的类型或习惯。建议修改常用动词和句子结构，并用连接词承接例子。

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and festivals. For instance, at Christmas I prepare small, thoughtful presents such as candles or homemade treats to wish my friends and family good fortune and happiness.

建议: 回答思路正确，但有多处用词不当（“passionate about joining” 不明确，应为“passionate about drawing”）；列举时词汇搭配需自然（用“paints”而非“pigment”，用“drawing paper”）。建议用清晰主题句，补充具体例子并使用连接词。

示例: I choose gifts based on the recipient's interests and needs. For example, my friend Amy loves drawing, so I often buy her art supplies like sketch pencils, watercolour paints, and high-quality drawing paper.

建议: 内容能回答问题但表达混乱且有语法错误（如“have every major embroidery”不通顺）。句子过长且结构不清晰，细节可更具体（说明手工种类、过程和反应）。建议用简洁的主题句，接着用一到两句具体描述并用连接词。

示例: Yes, I often give handmade gifts to close family members. For my sister's birthday I embroidered a small wall hanging, which took me about a week to complete, and she was very moved when she received it.

建议: 观点明确且合理，但有小的语法和表达问题（如“which made by my best friend”应为“made by my best friend”；“our families can't be measured by price”语义不够精确）。建议稍作修饰，用连贯的两到三句加强理由并举具体例子。

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because true affection isn't measured by price. Often inexpensive but thoughtful presents mean more; for example, a simple handmade card from my best friend once moved me to tears.

× I often prepare different gifts to my family or friends on their birthday or some special occasions.

✓ I often prepare different gifts for my family or friends on their birthdays or on special occasions.

使用介词时，prepare ... for 某人 更自然；而 birthday 应为复数形式表示不同人的生日；有时需要在 special occasions 前加 on 表示在某些场合。建议记住常用搭配：prepare something for someone；on someone's birthday / on special occasions。

× For example, last month I gave a homemade photo album to my younger sister Amy as her birthday gift that reminds us of some significant movement.

✓ For example, last month I gave a homemade photo album to my younger sister Amy as her birthday gift that reminded us of some significant moments.

句子描述过去发生的动作，定语从句中的动词也应使用过去时（reminded），且 movement 用法不当，表示“重要的时刻”应使用 moments（复数）。建议注意时间一致性（过去发生的事用过去时）并选择更恰当的名词。

× I really give gifts to others on special occasions such as their birthdays or festivals.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions such as their birthdays or festivals.

此处想表达“通常”而非强调程度的副词 really，使用 usually 更符合语境。虽然不是严格语法错误，但属于时态/词类选择问题。建议根据频率使用合适的副词（always/often/usually/sometimes）。

× For example, at Christmas I will prepare small gifts to my friends and family to wish them have a good fortune and happiness.

✓ For example, at Christmas I will prepare small gifts for my friends and family to wish them good fortune and happiness.

prepare ... for someone 更自然；短语 wish them have ... 语法错误，应为 wish them + 名词（wish them good fortune）或 wish them + that 从句。去掉不必要的冠词 a（good fortune 不可数）。建议固定表达：wish someone good luck / wish someone happiness / wish someone good fortune。

× I usually choose gift according to their personal preferences and what's available.

✓ I usually choose gifts according to their personal preferences and what's available.

名词数量不一致：choose gifts（复数）或 choose a gift（单数）；此处多指不同人所以用复数；according to 前面不需介词变化。建议注意可数名词单复数一致。

× For example, my best friend Amy is passionate about joining, therefore I usually tend to buy art supplies for her such as pencils, paint, pigment and drawing papers.

✓ For example, my best friend Amy is passionate about drawing, so I usually buy art supplies for her, such as pencils, paints, pigments, and drawing paper.

原句中 passionate about joining 不合逻辑，应该是 passionate about drawing；therefore 连词位置和逗号使用不当，so 更口语且更通顺；名词复数和不可数用法需注意：paint 作不可数或 paints/paints（颜料可复数），drawing paper 用不可数形式。建议：检查动词搭配和并列连词的使用，以及可数/不可数名词形式。

× For example, my younger sister enjoys handmade crafts, therefore I have every major embroidery which took me about a week to finish it to her as her birthday present and she was really touched.

✓ For example, my younger sister enjoys handmade crafts; therefore I embroidered a large piece of work that took me about a week to finish as her birthday present, and she was really touched.

原句时态和结构混乱：have every major embroidery 语法不通；应用过去式 embroidered 来表示完成的动作；which 从句后不应再加 it（冗余）；另外将句子拆分并用合适连接词更清晰。建议改用主动过去时并注意从句和代词指代一致。

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

该问题句式本身语法正确，但考生回答部分有问题："No, I don't think expensive gifts can express our feelings better because our families can't be measured by price." 中 'our families can't be measured by price' 用法不当，应改为 'feelings can't be measured by price' 或 'people can't be measured by price'。此处指出并改写回答："No, I don't think expensive gifts can express feelings better because feelings can't be measured by price. Sometimes inexpensive but thoughtful gifts are better." 建议关注主语搭配和被测量对象的逻辑一致性。

× For example, I am often moved by those handmade gifts which made by my best friend.

✓ For example, I am often moved by those handmade gifts made by my best friend.

关系从句中缺少被动助动词或宾语位置多余：which made by my best friend 应删去 which 或改为 which are made by my best friend。更自然的表达是直接用过去分词短语 made by my best friend。建议使用过去分词做后置定语或完整的被动从句：which are made by ...。