礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two brief supporting reasons. Avoid repetition and fix basic grammar (e.g., 'I love giving gifts', 'they show love and respect'). Keep under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. I think gifts are a way to show love and respect, and they help strengthen relationships. For example, I like choosing presents that reflect the recipient’s interests.

建议: Improve clarity and correct tense and article errors. Give a clear timeline and one specific example with correct grammar. Use linking words like 'for example' and keep it concise.

示例: I usually give gifts on birthdays and anniversaries. For example, last weekend I gave my boss a handmade card to show my appreciation because she has supported me at work.

建议: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence describing your main consideration, then give two specific factors. Correct pronouns and phrasing (e.g., 'useful for the recipient', 'their tastes and favorite colors'). Avoid redundancy.

示例: I choose gifts based on how useful they will be for the recipient. In particular, I consider the person’s tastes and favorite colors, and whether the item suits their lifestyle.

建议: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Start with a direct answer, then add one brief detail about what you make and why. Keep sentences grammatically correct and avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: Yes, I often make handmade cards because I enjoy art and crafts. I usually give them on birthdays to show love and appreciation, and the recipients always appreciate the personal touch.

建议: Provide a clear opinion and support it with one or two concise reasons. Fix grammar: 'In my opinion, the value of a gift does not depend on its price' and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

示例: In my opinion, the value of a gift does not depend on its price. A thoughtful or handmade gift can be more meaningful because it shows time and effort, which often expresses feelings better than something expensive.

× I love to giving gifts to my loved ones.

✓ I love to give gifts to my loved ones.

Using 'to' before a verb requires the base form (infinitive), not the -ing form. 'To giving' is incorrect; use 'to give'. Suggestion: use 'to give' or 'giving' without 'to' (e.g., 'I love giving gifts').

× It's showing love towards them as well as a good sense of respect.

✓ It shows love towards them and a sense of respect.

'It's showing' is an awkward continuous form; simple present 'it shows' fits general statements. 'A good sense of respect' is wordy; use 'a sense of respect'. Also 'as well as' can be replaced with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and concise noun phrases.

× In my point of view, giving gifts to the person is a useful things because it.

✓ In my point of view, giving gifts to a person is useful because it shows care and appreciation.

Problems: incorrect article 'the person' -> 'a person', plural mismatch 'things' -> 'useful' (adjective), and sentence is incomplete ('because it.' is fragment). Complete the clause with what 'it' does. Suggestion: ensure articles match count and finish the reason clause.

× For example on my on last weekend on my boss somebody birthday, I was giving a handmade card to her and it's showing affection towards her.

✓ For example, last weekend, on my boss's birthday, I gave her a handmade card, which showed my affection.

Multiple errors: redundant 'on', incorrect time expression 'on last weekend' -> 'last weekend', wrong possessive 'my boss somebody birthday' -> 'my boss's birthday', tense and aspect: simple past 'I gave' fits a completed action, not 'I was giving'. 'It's showing' should be 'which showed' to link results. Suggestion: use correct time prepositions, possessive 's, and simple past for completed events.

× Well I'm very choosy person, it's very difficult for me to pick one option between many.

✓ Well, I'm a very choosy person; it's very difficult for me to pick one option among many.

Missing article: 'a very choosy person'. Preposition choice: 'between many' should be 'among many' when more than two. Suggestion: include articles before singular nouns and use 'among' for multiple options.

× So I pick the one who is useful for the people I give gift to, gifted to.

✓ So I pick the one that is useful for the person I give the gift to.

Problems: relative pronoun 'who' is for people; for 'one (item)' use 'that' or 'which'. 'The people I give gift to' mismatches singular/plural; use 'the person' if singular. 'Gifted to' is incorrect repetition. Also include article 'the' before 'gift'. Suggestion: keep subject and object number consistent and avoid redundant phrases.

× So it's main thing is the taste of the people as well as which colour is liked by her.

✓ So the main thing is the person's taste and which colour she likes.

'It's main thing' should be 'the main thing'. 'The taste of the people' mismatches singular focus; use 'the person's taste'. 'Which colour is liked by her' is awkward passive; use active 'she likes'. Suggestion: use natural word order and possessive forms for clarity.

× Yes, I am pretty good in art and crafts so whenever I get a chance I made a handmade cards to my loved ones, giving them on their birthdays as a gift.

✓ Yes, I am pretty good at arts and crafts, so whenever I get a chance I make handmade cards for my loved ones and give them as birthday gifts.

Preposition: 'good in' -> 'good at'. Noun form: 'art and crafts' -> 'arts and crafts'. Tense: 'I made' -> 'I make' to indicate habitual action. Article/number: 'a handmade cards' incorrect; use 'handmade cards' or 'a handmade card'. Preposition 'to my loved ones' -> 'for my loved ones'. Phrase order improved: 'give them as birthday gifts'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions, pluralization, and simple present for habitual actions.

× It's showing my love and affection towards them as well as it's a good option to showing respect.

✓ It shows my love and affection for them and is a good way to show respect.

'It's showing' -> 'It shows' (simple present). 'towards' -> 'for' is more natural with 'love and affection'. 'it's a good option to showing respect' incorrect: use 'a good way to show respect'. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'way to' and simple present for general statements.

× And my perspective gifts is not depend on the expense, it's all depends on the lover and affection toward the people.

✓ In my perspective, gifts do not depend on expense; they all depend on love and affection for the people.

Grammar issues: 'gifts is' -> 'gifts do' (subject-verb agreement). 'not depend' requires auxiliary 'do not depend'. 'it's all depends' redundant auxiliary; use 'they all depend'. 'lover' misuse -> 'love'. 'toward the people' -> 'for the people'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct lexical choices.

× Even a handmade gifts are more proven beneficial for them and.

✓ Even handmade gifts are often more beneficial for them than expensive ones.

'a handmade gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or use singular 'a handmade gift'. 'more proven beneficial' is unnatural; use 'often more beneficial'. Sentence incomplete; finish comparison 'than expensive ones'. Suggestion: match articles and noun number and complete the comparative structure.

× More superior than the.

✓ They can be more meaningful than expensive gifts.

'More superior than the.' is a fragment and ungrammatical ('more superior' is redundant; 'superior' already means 'more'). 'the' is incomplete. Suggestion: complete the comparison, avoid redundant comparative forms, and provide the compared item (e.g., 'expensive gifts').