礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar; use one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "and also"). Correct pronoun and tense errors.

示例: Yes, I'm quite good at choosing gifts. For example, I gave my boyfriend a personalised photo frame with a small calendar marking the day we first met, which made it a meaningful keepsake.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence about occasions, then give two specific examples. Use correct noun forms and pronouns, and link ideas (e.g. "for example", "also") without redundancy.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays and Mother's or Father's Day. I also give gifts to my boyfriend whenever he visits me, because we are in a long-distance relationship and he only comes twice a year.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence about the main consideration, then explain two specific criteria using linking words. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g. "longer" → "for a long time", "used to give" → "will use").

示例: The main thing I consider is durability and usefulness. For instance, I prefer high-quality shoes that will last a long time, and I often choose everyday items like a wallet or watch that my boyfriend will actually use.

建议: Open with a direct yes/no and a short explanation, then give one specific example and link it to the effect on the receiver. Correct tense and pronoun mistakes and remove repetition.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I couldn't afford to buy expensive presents, so I made handmade cards for my mother and wrote heartfelt messages; she loved them because they felt personal and special.

建议: State your opinion clearly, then give a concise reason and a specific example. Reduce hesitation and filler words, correct grammar and phrasing (e.g. "express feelings" not "expressed the feeling").

示例: I think expensive gifts can show appreciation, especially when someone sacrifices to buy them. For example, as a student I saved up to buy my boyfriend a costly wallet he wanted, and he appreciated it because he knew it was a real effort for me.

× Yes, I always say I'm pretty good at giving gifts.

✓ Yes, I would say I'm pretty good at giving gifts.

The original sentence uses 'I always say' which is awkward in this context; using 'I would say' or 'I think' is more natural for expressing self-assessment. Suggestion: use modal expression 'would' for tentative opinions.

× So I like to give a special gift to my friend and also my boyfriend and also my family members.

✓ So I like to give special gifts to my friends, my boyfriend, and my family members.

Pluralize 'gift' to 'gifts' when referring generally, and use 'to' before the recipients only once; also use plural 'friends' if referring to more than one. Suggestion: match singular/plural and use commas for lists.

× So for my boyfriend, I used to give him a gift where there is a photo frame with a photo inside and then it is labeled and there is a calendar beside and labeled the day when we meet.

✓ For my boyfriend, I used to give him a gift that included a photo frame with a picture inside and a calendar beside it labeled with the day we met.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses passive 'labeled' awkwardly. Use 'included' and 'labeled with' to correctly form compound noun phrases. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent ('used to give', 'included', 'labeled').

× So it's a really special gift.

✓ It was a really special gift.

Context describes a past habit ('used to give'), so the concluding sentence should be in past tense. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense in the same narrative.

× I usually give gifts to the others during the special occasion so for example during the birthday or the parents day or happy day, mother day or father days.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions, for example on birthdays, Parents' Day, Mother's Day, or Father's Day.

Remove 'the' before 'others', use plural 'occasions', use preposition 'on' for days, pluralize 'birthday' to 'birthdays', and use possessive apostrophes for Parents', Mother's, Father's Day. Suggestion: use standard collocations 'on special occasions' and correct holidays' forms.

× Or I will usually give the gift to my boyfriend when the day she he visited me because he we are in long distance and he only visit me like twice a year.

✓ I usually give gifts to my boyfriend when he visits me, because we are in a long-distance relationship and he only visits me about twice a year.

Pronouns were confused ('she he', 'he we'); correct singular subject 'he' and plural subject 'we'. Use 'visits' for third person singular and 'a long-distance relationship' as standard phrase. Suggestion: keep subject pronouns consistent and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Whenever I choose again I will consider the quality.

✓ Whenever I choose a gift, I consider the quality.

Remove awkward 'again' and use present simple 'consider' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'whenever I choose a gift' and present tense for habits.

× So for example, I used to buy a shoe for my boyfriend before and then uh and I would choose the expensive one because I want him to wear a longer.

✓ For example, I once bought a pair of shoes for my boyfriend and chose an expensive one because I wanted it to last longer.

Use 'a pair of shoes' not 'a shoe', keep past tense ('bought', 'chose', 'wanted'), and 'last longer' instead of 'wear a longer'. Suggestion: maintain correct noun forms and past tense throughout.

× Beside this I will also choose is my boyfriend really used to give or no.

✓ Besides this, I also consider whether my boyfriend will actually use it or not.

Original mixes forms and word order; use 'consider whether' and 'will actually use it' for clarity. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb-object order.

× So I will choose the gift that he will use every day for example like a wallet or watch.

✓ So I choose gifts that he will use every day, for example a wallet or a watch.

Use present simple for habitual preference and include articles 'a wallet' and 'a watch'. Remove redundant 'like'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and proper articles.

× Yes, when I was a kid I loved giving him a gift for my mother's because at the time I I don't have money to buy expensive gift.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I loved giving gifts to my mother because at that time I didn't have money to buy expensive presents.

Use past tense 'didn't have', correct possessive 'my mother' (not 'my mother's'), plural 'gifts' or 'presents', and remove incorrect 'him'. Suggestion: ensure past tense consistency and correct possessive/plural forms.

× So I usually like to draw or design a special card for my mother and she loved it very much because it's very special and I also write some words that need to tell her.

✓ So I usually liked to draw or design special cards for my mother, and she loved them very much because they were special; I also wrote some words to tell her how I felt.

Match past tense ('liked', 'loved', 'were', 'wrote') and use plural 'cards' and pronouns 'them'. Rephrase 'words that need to tell her' to 'words to tell her how I felt'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and improve clarity.

× In my opinion, I think a an expensive gift really expressed the feeling that I really appreciate the person and I want to buy the best for him As for example I'm a student right now so.

✓ In my opinion, an expensive gift can express that I appreciate someone and want to buy the best for them; for example, I am a student right now, so...

Remove double articles 'a an', use present simple/modal 'can express', use gender-neutral 'them' or 'him' consistently, fix punctuation and sentence fragments. Suggestion: avoid redundancy ('In my opinion, I think') and complete the thought.

× But I will still like save money for my boyfriend to buy the wallet that is expensive that he want and he also really appreciate it because umm as I'm a student, it's expensive for me.

✓ But I still save money to buy my boyfriend the expensive wallet he wants, and he really appreciates it because, as a student, it is expensive for me.

Use present simple for habitual action ('save'), use correct verb forms ('wants', 'appreciates'), and adjust word order for clarity. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and natural word order.