礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct pronoun use, and give one brief supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if adding reason.

示例: Yes, I'm quite good at giving gifts. I often buy presents for my friends and family, and I especially like surprising my girlfriend because she appreciates thoughtful gestures.

建议: Answer directly with a topic sentence and add a specific example. Reduce hesitations and use linking words to list occasions.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. For example, I buy a cake and a small present for my sister's birthday every year.

建议: Structure your answer: state the main consideration first, then give specific factors and an example. Avoid vague phrases and correct sentence structure.

示例: I consider who the gift is for as the most important factor. For instance, for a birthday I might choose a cake or a personal item, while for an anniversary I would pick something more romantic or meaningful.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then describe one specific past example with concise details and correct tense and word order.

示例: Yes, I have. I'm good at drawing, so I often make handmade portraits. Last month I drew a pencil portrait of my girlfriend and framed it as a birthday present.

建议: Avoid unclear statements and contradictions. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons and an example. Use natural vocabulary about feelings rather than saying 'expensive is getting'.

示例: I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. In my view, a thoughtful or handmade gift can show care more than an expensive item; for example, a heartfelt letter or a homemade photo album feels more personal than an expensive gadget.

× Yes I like to good at giving gift because sometimes I give gift to my uh friends, cousin and family members and also I have a special one.

✓ Yes, I like giving gifts because sometimes I give gifts to my friends, cousins, and family members, and I also have a special person.

Original sentence uses 'to good at' incorrectly; 'good' is an adjective and 'be good at' requires 'be' and a gerund (e.g., 'be good at giving'). The phrase 'giving gift' needs plural 'gifts' and plural forms for recipients: 'friends, cousins, and family members'. 'Special one' is unclear; 'special person' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'I like giving gifts' or 'I'm good at giving gifts' depending on intended meaning.

× I always try to uh surprise to my girlfriend because he likes to give gift.

✓ I always try to surprise my girlfriend because she likes receiving gifts.

Pronoun gender is incorrect: 'girlfriend' requires 'she' not 'he'. Also 'surprise to my girlfriend' incorrectly includes 'to' after 'surprise'; the verb 'surprise' takes an object directly. 'Likes to give gift' mismatches meaning; if girlfriend likes receiving gifts use 'likes receiving gifts'. Use consistent pronouns and correct verb-object structure.

× Umm I usually give gift to others umm for their special moment like birthday party, uh anniversary and so on.

✓ Umm, I usually give gifts to others for special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, and so on.

Use plural 'gifts' and plural nouns for recurring events ('birthdays, anniversaries'). 'Special moment' is better expressed as 'special occasions'. Maintain noun plurality and idiomatic collocations.

× So it will depend which is the day.

✓ So it depends on the day.

Original 'which is the day' is non-idiomatic. Use the structure 'it depends on' followed by the noun 'the day' to convey meaning concisely. Keep present simple tense for habitual actions.

× Uh, actually I consider, uh, who is gift best for them?

✓ Uh, actually I think about who the gift is best for.

Word order is incorrect. 'Consider' is followed by a noun or clause; 'think about' is more natural in spoken English. 'Who is gift best for' should be 'who the gift is best for' or 'who a gift would suit best'.

× Like it, it's a birthday party, so I will arrange a cake and it's a anniversary or, uh, any, uh, occasion, so I'll choose another's.

✓ If it's a birthday party, I will arrange a cake, and if it's an anniversary or any other occasion, I'll choose something else.

Several issues: article 'a anniversary' should be 'an anniversary'. 'It's a birthday party' is fine but 'Like it,' is unnecessary. 'I'll choose another's' is ungrammatical; use 'something else' or 'a different gift'. Use conditional structure 'If it's...' to indicate situations.

× Yes, in many times because I'm a good artist, so sometimes I craft a photo another person like last time I gifted to my girlfriend her crafting photo I craft by pencil by hand.

✓ Yes, many times because I'm a good artist, so sometimes I make portraits of other people. For example, last time I gave my girlfriend a pencil portrait I drew by hand.

Use 'many times' without 'in'. 'Craft a photo another person' is ungrammatical; 'make portraits of other people' or 'draw portraits' is correct. 'I gifted to my girlfriend her crafting photo' has wrong word order and verb choice; use 'I gave my girlfriend a pencil portrait I drew by hand'. Maintain past tense for the completed action 'gave' and use 'drew' or 'drawn' appropriately.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question is grammatically acceptable as written; no correction needed. It uses plural 'gifts' correctly and forms a question appropriately. No change required.

× Yes, obviously, uh, expensive is getting is more important my, uh, positive feelings because someone, uh, wants for me a good manner and behavior.

✓ Yes, obviously expensive gifts can better express my positive feelings because someone may want to show good manners and behavior for me.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words: 'expensive is getting is more important my positive feelings' is ungrammatical. Clarify meaning: 'expensive gifts can better express my positive feelings' or 'expensive gifts seem to express feelings more strongly'. 'Someone wants for me a good manner' is unclear; rephrase as 'someone may want to show good manners'.

× And if I give someone something, obviously it will be a deeply from my heart.

✓ And if I give someone something, it will obviously come from my heart.

'Be a deeply from my heart' is ungrammatical. Use 'come from my heart' or 'be deeply from my heart' is not idiomatic. Place adverb 'obviously' before verb phrase for natural flow. Use 'come from' to express sincerity.