金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks proper sentence structure. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy. For example, explain when and why you borrowed money, and how you managed to repay it.

示例: Yes, I have borrowed money from a friend when I was short of income and needed to pay my rent. Since it was difficult to manage at that time, I contacted my friend and borrowed a small amount. Fortunately, I was able to repay the money promptly.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. Then, provide specific details about when and why you lent money, and how it made you feel. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I have lent money to others when they needed help. Since they had supported me before, I wanted to return the favour. I lent money without charging any interest, and I felt happy to assist them in their time of need.

× Is a hub borrow money from my friend when I was out of income I was I want to actually pay my rent at the moment so hard to.

✓ I borrowed money from my friend when I was out of income because I wanted to pay my rent at that moment, so it was hard.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence structure and clarity. It is a run-on sentence with missing subjects and verbs. The correction breaks it into a clear, grammatically correct sentence with proper tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Contact my friend and lost a few amount.

✓ I contacted my friend and borrowed a small amount.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Lost a few amount' is incorrect and does not convey the intended meaning. The correction uses the correct verb 'contacted' and clarifies the action of borrowing money.

× So I can repay my friend, that's why.

✓ I borrowed money so that I could repay my friend later.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction provides a complete sentence explaining the reason for borrowing money with proper conjunction and tense.

× 'Cause I have no money to others.

✓ I have not lent money to others because I have no money.

The original sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. 'Cause' is informal and the phrase 'have no money to others' is incorrect. The correction forms a complete sentence with proper negation and clarity.

× As they helped me a few points so I did them or whatever I can.

✓ Since they helped me a few times, I helped them back as much as I could.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'A few points' is incorrect in this context. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses proper sentence structure.

× Oh. I did it without any interest, but actually I'm happy that helps them.

✓ I lent money without any interest, and I am happy to help them.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction combines the ideas into a clear, grammatically correct sentence with proper tense and subject-verb agreement.