金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: In your answer, try to use more natural and concise language. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure by using past tense consistently. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, instead of 'there are times when I have borrowed money from others, but those times were when I am very desperate in buying something,' you can say 'Yes, I have borrowed money from others, especially when I was desperate to buy something important.'

示例: Yes, I have borrowed money from others, especially when I was desperate to buy something important. For instance, last year I needed to buy a new laptop for my studies, so I asked my friend to lend me some money.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and consistent verb tenses. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'There are a few times where I have lent money to others,' say 'Yes, I have lent money to others a few times.' Also, avoid repeating 'money' unnecessarily.

示例: Yes, I have lent money to others a few times. For example, last year, when my friend urgently needed funds for medical expenses, I lent her about $50 to help.

× I would admit that there are times when I have borrowed money from others, but those times were when I am very desperate in buying something, otherwise I wouldn't have bothered to ask for money.

✓ I would admit that there are times when I have borrowed money from others, but those times were when I was very desperate to buy something; otherwise, I wouldn't have bothered to ask for money.

The error is in the use of 'am' which is present tense, but the sentence refers to past situations ('those times were'). Therefore, 'am' should be changed to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'in buying something' is better expressed as 'to buy something' to correctly use the infinitive form after 'desperate'. Additionally, a semicolon or period is needed before 'otherwise' to separate the clauses properly.

× There are a few times where I have lent money to others. For instance, last year my friend was in urgent need of money for her medical expenses, so I have provided her with around $50.

✓ There have been a few times when I have lent money to others. For instance, last year my friend was in urgent need of money for her medical expenses, so I provided her with around $50.

The phrase 'There are a few times' is incorrect because it refers to past events; it should be 'There have been a few times' to use present perfect tense correctly. Also, 'where' should be 'when' to refer to times. In the second sentence, 'I have provided' is incorrect because the action happened at a specific time in the past ('last year'), so simple past 'I provided' is appropriate.