金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: I have rarely borrowed money from others because my parents usually give me enough. However, once I lost my money while shopping at the market, which was a stressful situation. Fortunately, my friend lent me some money, and I returned it as soon as I got home.

建议: Your answer should be more organized and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain the situation with specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases to improve clarity.

示例: Yes, I have lent money to others. For example, when my friend and I went shopping, he needed ₹200 but only had ₹150 from his parents. I gave him the remaining ₹50, which he initially refused but later returned the next day.

× To be honest as my parents didn't allowed me to borrow money from other people as they give me enough money but moreover when I got when I lost my money in my market while purchasing something, it was a tense tense situation.

✓ To be honest, my parents didn't allow me to borrow money from other people as they gave me enough money, but moreover, when I lost my money in the market while purchasing something, it was a tense situation.

The verb 'allowed' should be in base form 'allow' after 'didn't' because 'did' already indicates past tense. Also, 'give' should be in past tense 'gave' to match the past context. The phrase 'when I got when I lost' is redundant and confusing; it should be simplified to 'when I lost'. 'My market' is incorrect; it should be 'the market'. The repetition 'tense tense' is unnecessary.

× So my friend gave me as as give me a money but I but I return him after reaching the home.

✓ So my friend gave me some money, but I returned it to him after reaching home.

The phrase 'as as give me a money' is incorrect; it should be 'some money'. The verb 'return' should be in past tense 'returned' to match the past context. Also, 'return him' is incorrect; the correct form is 'returned it to him'. 'After reaching the home' should be 'after reaching home' for natural phrasing.

× Yes honestly speaking when my friend and me went for shopping he had buy the item of ₹200 but he has only taken 150 from her parents.

✓ Yes, honestly speaking, when my friend and I went shopping, he had to buy an item of ₹200 but he had only taken ₹150 from his parents.

The pronoun 'me' should be 'I' as the subject of the sentence. 'Had buy' is incorrect; it should be 'had to buy' or 'wanted to buy'. 'Has only taken' should be in past perfect 'had only taken' to maintain past context. 'Her parents' is incorrect; it should be 'his parents' referring to the male friend.

× He left short video ₹50 I gave him ₹50 but he declined to take but I I said you return me.

✓ He was short of ₹50, so I gave him ₹50 but he declined to take it, but I said you should return it to me.

The phrase 'left short video ₹50' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'was short of ₹50'. The sentence lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation. 'You return me' is incorrect; it should be 'you should return it to me' for clarity and correctness.

× He return after after a night.

✓ He returned after a night.

The verb 'return' should be in past tense 'returned' to match the past context. The repetition 'after after' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'after'.