金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to enhance coherence. Also, avoid redundancy and keep the answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, instead of 'I had borrowed money in the past when I came to Canada,' you could say 'When I first arrived in Canada, I borrowed money from a friend.'

示例: When I first arrived in Canada, I borrowed $1000 from a friend because I needed to pay my upcoming tuition fees. This helped me start my next semester on time without any delays.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear phrases and incomplete sentences. To improve, use clearer expressions, complete your thoughts, and add linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'passed regarding her financial issues' and be specific about the situation.

示例: Yes, I lent $500 to my best friend when she was going through a difficult financial situation. She needed the money to pay her rent, and I wanted to help her reduce her stress during that tough time.

× Yes, I had borrowed money in the past when I came to Canada, I had upcoming school fees and I was short of $1000.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money in the past when I came to Canada because I had upcoming school fees and I was short of $1000.

The past perfect tense 'had borrowed' is incorrectly used here because the action is simply a past event without a reference to another past event before it. The simple past 'borrowed' is appropriate. Also, the sentence was a run-on and was corrected by adding 'because' to clarify the reason.

× So my friend lent me some money to pay my tuition fees so that I can start my next semester as soon as possible.

✓ So my friend lent me some money to pay my tuition fees so that I could start my next semester as soon as possible.

The modal verb 'can' is incorrect here because the action refers to a past possibility or ability. The past modal 'could' should be used to match the past context.

× Yes, I have lent money to my best friend.

✓ Yes, I lent money to my best friend.

The present perfect 'have lent' is less appropriate here because the question asks about a past experience without a connection to the present. The simple past 'lent' fits better in this context.

× She was in kind of tough situation and passed regarding her financial issues.

✓ She was in a kind of tough situation and stressed about her financial issues.

The phrase 'passed regarding' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'stressed about' to indicate worry or difficulty related to financial issues. Also, 'a kind of' requires the article 'a' before it.

× So I gave her that so she can release some stress and.

✓ So I gave her that so she could relieve some stress.

The modal verb 'can' should be 'could' to match the past context. Also, 'release some stress' is not idiomatic; the correct phrase is 'relieve some stress'. The sentence was incomplete and was corrected accordingly.