金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท เช่น แทนที่จะพูดว่า 'car video' ควรใช้ 'car' หรือ 'vehicle' และควรใช้รูปแบบกริยาที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I had to borrow money from my parents to fix my car because I use it to travel to work.'

示例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my parents. It happened when my car broke down, and I had to pay a lot to fix it because I use my car to travel to work. Therefore, I had to borrow money from them to cover the repair costs.

建议: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น แทนคำว่า 'shot a little of money' ควรใช้ 'short of money' และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค เช่น 'because' และ 'but' ควรใช้รูปแบบกริยาที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'he always pays me back at the end of the month.'

示例: Yes, I have lent money to my close friend. He often asks to borrow money because he is short of cash, but he always pays me back at the end of the month.

× Yes I do but the person I borrowed is my parents.

✓ Yes, I have, but the people I borrowed from are my parents.

The sentence is about a past experience, so the present perfect tense 'have' is appropriate instead of 'do'. Also, 'person' should be plural 'people' because 'parents' is plural. Additionally, the verb 'borrowed' requires the preposition 'from' to indicate the source.

× It happened when my car was broken and I have to pay a lot of money to fix it to because I used car video to travel to work so I have to borrowed my money from my parent to pay.

✓ It happened when my car was broken, and I had to pay a lot of money to fix it because I used a car to travel to work, so I had to borrow money from my parents to pay.

The sentence describes a past event, so past tense verbs 'had to' and 'borrow' should be used instead of present tense forms. 'Used car video' is incorrect; it should be 'used a car'. 'Borrowed my money from my parent' is incorrect; it should be 'borrow money from my parents'. Also, 'to' after 'fix it' is unnecessary and removed.

× Yes I do, it's actually my close friend.

✓ Yes, I have, it's actually my close friend.

The question is about past experience, so present perfect 'have' is appropriate instead of 'do'. Comma added after 'Yes' for clarity.

× He always asked me to let him borrow the money because he was shot a little of money but he always pay back when the month end.

✓ He always asks me to let him borrow money because he has little money, but he always pays me back at the end of the month.

The habitual action requires present tense 'asks' and 'pays' instead of past 'asked' and 'pay'. 'Was shot a little of money' is incorrect; it should be 'has little money'. 'When the month end' should be 'at the end of the month'. Also, 'the money' is unnecessary before 'borrow' and 'pay back' should be 'pays me back' for clarity.