金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains several hesitations and repetitions, which affects the natural flow. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends several times. For example, when I needed to pay my tuition fees, I borrowed between 2000 and 3000 Canadian dollars from a friend who was very helpful. This support really eased my financial burden at that time.

建议: Your answer shows willingness to help friends, but it includes hesitations and some grammatical errors. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific details. Also, try to avoid filler words and keep your answer concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they needed help. For instance, one of my college friends needed to pay his tuition fees, so I lent him some money to cover the cost. I am always willing to support my friends in difficult times.

× Have to record yeah, I borrow, uh, I borrowed money from my friends a lot I remember that, uh, when I took pay, pay my tuition fees, I had to borrow some of the money from my friends and he was very helpful with helpful at that time for me and he gave me some money or uh, amount ranging from 2000 to 3000 Canadian dollars and.

✓ Yeah, I have borrowed money from my friends a lot. I remember that when I paid my tuition fees, I had to borrow some money from my friends. He was very helpful at that time and gave me an amount ranging from 2000 to 3000 Canadian dollars.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present and past tense verbs such as 'borrow' and 'took pay'. The correct past tense forms should be used consistently to describe past events. For example, 'borrowed' instead of 'borrow', and 'paid' instead of 'took pay'. Also, the sentence structure was unclear and needed to be split for clarity.

× he was very helpful with helpful at that time for me

✓ he was very helpful to me at that time

The phrase 'helpful with helpful' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition to use with 'helpful' when referring to a person is 'to'. Therefore, 'helpful to me' is the proper expression.

× Yeah, I have, uh, gave, I, I have given money to a lot of my friends whenever they need some money and they need my help, I'm always there for them.

✓ Yeah, I have given money to a lot of my friends whenever they needed some money and needed my help. I'm always there for them.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present perfect 'have given' with simple past 'gave' and present tense 'need'. The correct form is to use past tense 'needed' to match the past action context. Also, 'gave' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow.

× whenever they need some money and they need my help

✓ whenever they needed some money and needed my help

Since the context refers to past events, the verb 'need' should be in the past tense 'needed' to maintain tense consistency.

× I remember that he need to pay his tuition fees at that time, so I just gave him some money so that he can pay his tuition.

✓ I remember that he needed to pay his tuition fees at that time, so I just gave him some money so that he could pay his tuition.

The verb 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match the past context. Also, 'can' should be changed to 'could' to reflect past ability or possibility.