金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct verb tenses and avoiding repetition. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I have borrowed money before. When I was a child, I asked my mom for some money to go on a trip with my friends, but she refused. So, I decided to earn the money myself and managed to go on a beautiful trip the next day.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific details to enrich your response.

示例: Yes, I have lent money to others. For example, when I was 18, my little brother was unsure whether to ask our parents for money, so he asked me instead. I lent him $100, and he promised to pay me back later.

× When I was a child I remembered that I asked my mom to pour me some money for a journey with my friends and she refused and after that I I made my money by myself and go to a beautiful trip with my friends in the next day.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that I asked my mom to give me some money for a journey with my friends, and she refused. After that, I made my own money and went on a beautiful trip with my friends the next day.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'remembered' instead of 'remember' to describe a past memory, which is a present tense usage. Also, 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past narrative. 'Pour me some money' is incorrect; 'give me some money' is appropriate. 'In the next day' should be 'the next day'. These corrections align the sentence with proper past tense narration and correct verb usage.

× When I was a child I remembered that I asked my mom to pour me some money for a journey with my friends and she refused and after that I I made my money by myself and go to a beautiful trip with my friends in the next day.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that I asked my mom to give me some money for a journey with my friends, and she refused. After that, I made my own money and went on a beautiful trip with my friends the next day.

The phrase 'go to a beautiful trip' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go on a trip'. Also, 'pour me some money' is not idiomatic; 'give me some money' is correct. 'In the next day' should be 'the next day' without 'in'. These preposition corrections improve the sentence's naturalness and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I have as uh, when I was 18, I remembered that my little brother asked me for lending some money as he was, uh, very confusing of asking my mom or dad and I gave him $100 and he packed, uh, for me.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was 18, I remember that my little brother asked me to lend him some money because he was very confused about asking my mom or dad, and I gave him $100, and he paid me back.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'remembered' instead of 'remember' to describe a past memory, which should be present tense. 'Asked me for lending' is incorrect; it should be 'asked me to lend'. 'Very confusing of asking' is incorrect; it should be 'very confused about asking'. 'He packed for me' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'he paid me back'. These corrections fix verb forms, prepositions, and word choice to improve clarity and grammatical correctness.