金钱— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文全体が長くなり、言い淀み（umm）があり、数字の表現や返済に関する情報が曖昧です。改善点としては：1) 言い淀みを減らし、より簡潔なトピック文で始める。2) 金額の表現を正確にし、句読点で文を分ける。3) 返済の意図を明確に短い追加文で示す。例文の語順と接続詞（because, so）を自然に使う練習をしてください。

示例: Yes, I have. I recently borrowed ¥90,000 from my parents to go on a trip to Osaka with friends. I didn't have enough savings, so they lent me the money and I plan to pay them back within three months.

建议: 内容が途中で途切れており、語順や単語のミス（"lunch her"など）や言い淀み（uh）が目立ちます。改善点は：1) 文を完結させ、具体的なエピソードを短くまとめる。2) 適切な語彙（"pay for her lunch"など）を使う。3) 接続詞（for example, so）で流れを整え、結果を明示する。練習では一息で簡潔に話すことに注意してください。

示例: Yes, I have. I often lend money to close friends. For example, once at a restaurant a friend forgot to bring cash, so I paid for her lunch and she paid me back the next day.

× I borrowed three ¥30,000 from my parents

✓ I borrowed three ¥30,000 bills from my parents

The original is unclear and likely incorrect number expression; 'three ¥30,000' mixes numeral and currency without a noun. Use a noun like 'bills' or rephrase as '¥90,000' to indicate total amount. Suggestion: say 'I borrowed ¥90,000 from my parents' for clarity and correct singular/plural usage.

× because I'm going to travel to Osaka with my friends, but I didn't have enough money to do that, so I decided to borrow from my parents and return.

✓ because I was going to travel to Osaka with my friends, but I didn't have enough money, so I decided to borrow from my parents and pay them back.

Tense inconsistency: 'I'm going to travel' (present/future) conflicts with past actions 'I didn't have' and 'I decided'. Use past tense 'I was going to travel' to match the past context. Also 'return' is incorrect verb choice; use 'pay them back' or 'return the money'.

× I often lend money to my close friends For example, when we went to restaurant uh together, my one of my friends forget forgot to bring cash so I lunch her and she.

✓ I often lend money to my close friends. For example, when we went to a restaurant together, one of my friends forgot to bring cash, so I lent her some money.

Multiple problems: verb form 'forget' should be past 'forgot' to match past event (third person). 'Lunch her' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'lend her' or 'lent her'. Also sentence missing object after 'she' and article before 'restaurant'. Corrections: use 'a restaurant', past tense 'forgot', past 'lent', and provide object 'some money'.

× when we went to restaurant uh together

✓ when we went to a restaurant together

Missing article 'a' before 'restaurant'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner. Add 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× so I lunch her and she.

✓ so I lent her some money.

'Lunch' is incorrect verb; context requires past tense 'lent' (past of 'lend'). Also original sentence is incomplete ('and she' is dangling). Provide complete clause 'lent her some money' to convey the action clearly.