应用程序— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be improved by correcting grammar and making the response more concise and natural. For example, avoid phrases like "a kid of 21st century" and use correct tense such as "I spend hours" instead of "I spent hours". Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I have recently used several social media apps like Instagram, TikTok, and Snapchat. I enjoy them because they help me stay connected with my friends. However, they can be quite addictive, and I often lose track of time while using them.

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and better linking words. For example, instead of "help me cut my time," say "help me stay connected." Also, avoid starting sentences with 'And'; instead, use linking words like 'Additionally' or 'Moreover'.

示例: I am usually interested in social media apps like Instagram and Messenger because they allow me to connect with my friends and share my daily moments. Additionally, I enjoy seeing updates about how other people are doing on these platforms.

建议: Your answer has some hesitation and lacks fluency. Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. For example, start with how you discover apps, then mention recommendations and your criteria for downloading them.

示例: I usually find out about new apps through advertisements on my mobile phone. Sometimes, my friends recommend apps to me, or I notice them when I visit schools or other places. If I find an app attractive and of good quality, I download and start using it.

建议: Your answer shows some hesitation and unclear phrasing. Try to express your ideas more confidently and clearly. Avoid filler words and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be more specific about the kind of apps you want to use in the future.

示例: I haven't thought much about future apps, but I would like to use apps that allow me to communicate with my friends over long distances without needing an Internet connection. Although this might not be possible now, I hope technology will develop to make this happen.

× I like them because it helps me connect with my friends.

✓ I like them because they help me connect with my friends.

The subject 'them' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' instead of 'helps' to agree in number.

× However, they are very addictive and I spent hours on these apps and not know what the time is.

✓ However, they are very addictive and I spend hours on these apps and do not know what time it is.

The sentence mixes past tense 'spent' with present context. 'Spend' fits better as the habit is ongoing. Also, 'not know' is incorrect; it should be 'do not know' for proper negation in present tense.

× To help me cut my time, I usually use apps like Instagram and Messenger so that I can connect with my friends and share my daily moments with them.

✓ To help me save time, I usually use apps like Instagram and Messenger so that I can connect with my friends and share my daily moments with them.

The phrase 'cut my time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'save time' when referring to reducing time spent.

× And I like to watch how other people are doing from various social medias.

✓ And I like to watch how other people are doing on various social media platforms.

'Social media' is an uncountable noun and does not take 's' for plural. Also, the preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'on' is appropriate for platforms.

× I find out about different ads through my mobile phone only.

✓ I find out about different apps through my mobile phone only.

The question is about apps, but the student says 'ads' which is likely a mistake. Also, 'find out about' is correct, but the object should be 'apps' to match context.

× Well, some of them are recommended to me by my friends or, umm, maybe I saw them in some schools or places I visit.

✓ Well, some of them are recommended to me by my friends or, umm, maybe I saw them in some schools or places I have visited.

The phrase 'places I visit' should be in present perfect 'places I have visited' to indicate past experiences relevant to the present.

× Uh, if I find that attractive.

✓ Uh, if I find it attractive,

This is a sentence fragment; it needs to be connected to the next clause or completed. Also, 'that' should be 'it' referring to the app.

× If I find the quality attractive, I just download it and uh, start to use it.

✓ If I find the quality attractive, I just download it and, uh, start using it.

The phrase 'start to use it' is acceptable but 'start using it' is more natural. Also, the sentence is fine structurally but the previous fragment needs correction.

× I haven't really thought about it, but if I had to use, umm, some apps in the future, I would like it to be more connecting apps, uh, to which, uh, I can talk to my friends in a long distance without any Internet connection.

✓ I haven't really thought about it, but if I had to use, umm, some apps in the future, I would like them to be more connecting apps, uh, through which I can talk to my friends over a long distance without any Internet connection.

'I would like it' should be 'I would like them' to agree with plural 'apps'. 'To which' is awkward; 'through which' is better. Also, 'in a long distance' should be 'over a long distance'.