应用程序— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples to support your points.

示例: I recently used the YouTube app because it helps me improve my listening and speaking skills. Additionally, I watch cooking videos there, which I find both entertaining and educational.

建议: Your answer should be more structured with clear sentences and linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and be specific about how these apps help you. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary relevant to the context.

示例: I usually use apps like WhatsApp, Instagram, Snapchat, and YouTube daily. These apps help me stay connected with my family and also support my business communications effectively.

建议: Your response lacks clarity and coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain how you discover apps. Be specific about the methods you use and avoid grammatical errors.

示例: I usually find out about new apps through recommendations from my friends. Additionally, I explore the apps already installed on my phone, such as the phone log and system message apps, to see if they are useful for me.

建议: Your answer should be more grammatically correct and concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you want to use the app in the future. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

示例: In the future, I would like to use Microsoft Teams because it allows me to make video calls with my colleagues, edit documents collaboratively, and share my screen during meetings, which makes teamwork more efficient.

× It's a very effective for me to use because it provides a helpful to improve my listening and speaking skills.

✓ It's very effective for me to use because it provides helpful resources to improve my listening and speaking skills.

The definite article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'very effective' and 'helpful'. 'Effective' and 'helpful' are adjectives here and do not require 'a'. Also, 'a helpful' is incomplete; it should be 'helpful resources' or similar. Removing 'a' and adding a noun after 'helpful' corrects the sentence.

× I also use it as a entertainment purpose and sometimes I was the other videos how we gonna cook different recipes and I will use.

✓ I also use it for entertainment purposes and sometimes I watch other videos on how we are going to cook different recipes and I will use them.

The preposition 'as' is incorrect; 'for' is appropriate with 'entertainment purposes'. 'Was' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'watch'. 'Gonna' is informal and should be 'going to'. Also, 'I will use' is incomplete; specifying 'them' clarifies the object.

× I usually like to use several apps as available in my mobile phone I use on daily basis such as the WhatsApp, Instagram, Snapchat, YouTube and as well as call log and it's helped me to be connected with my family members and I can use my business purpose.

✓ I usually like to use several apps available on my mobile phone that I use on a daily basis, such as WhatsApp, Instagram, Snapchat, YouTube, as well as the call log. They help me stay connected with my family members and I can use them for my business purposes.

The phrase 'as available' is incorrect; 'available on' is correct. 'On daily basis' needs the article 'a'. 'The WhatsApp' is incorrect; app names do not need 'the'. 'It's helped' should be 'they help' to agree with plural subject 'apps'. 'Use my business purpose' is incorrect; 'use them for my business purposes' is correct.

× Some app to suggest by my friend too and some after I find my own ways like a phone log and system message apps and so already available in the phone.

✓ Some apps are suggested by my friends too, and some I find on my own, like the phone log and system message apps that are already available on the phone.

'Some app to suggest by my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'Some apps are suggested by my friends'. 'After I find my own ways' is awkward; 'some I find on my own' is better. 'Like a phone log' should be 'like the phone log'. 'Available in the phone' should be 'available on the phone'.

× I downloaded only Instagram, Snapchat and WhatsApp and it starts becoming important for me just the daily basis.

✓ I downloaded only Instagram, Snapchat, and WhatsApp and they have started becoming important for me on a daily basis.

'It starts becoming' is incorrect because the subject is plural apps; 'they have started becoming' is correct. 'Just the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. Commas are needed in the list.

× I think individual I would be use the Microsoft team because are they very effective app.

✓ I think individually I would use Microsoft Teams because it is a very effective app.

'Would be use' is incorrect; it should be 'would use'. 'Are they very effective app' is incorrect; correct is 'it is a very effective app'. 'Microsoft Teams' is the correct name.

× I can connect video call with my clicks and also can edit some documents on it and there's other options to share the window with under doing the video call and it's a very effective for the team meeting.

✓ I can make video calls with my colleagues and also edit some documents on it. There are other options to share the window during the video call and it's very effective for team meetings.

'Connect video call with my clicks' is incorrect; 'make video calls with my colleagues' is correct. 'There's other options' should be 'There are other options'. 'Share the window with under doing the video call' is incorrect; 'share the window during the video call' is correct. 'It's a very effective' should be 'it's very effective'. 'Team meeting' should be plural 'team meetings'.