应用程序— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'on daily basis' twice and correct grammar errors such as 'a video games app' to 'video game apps'. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I usually use social media apps like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp to stay connected with my friends and family. Besides that, I enjoy playing video game apps for entertainment.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Avoid vague phrases like 'rain checks' which seem out of context. Try to give specific reasons why you like Instagram and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I am usually interested in social media apps, especially Instagram, because it offers a wide variety of entertainment and helps me stay updated with my friends daily.

建议: Your answer needs better sentence structure and grammar. Instead of 'in on my phone day', say 'on my phone'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about how you explore apps.

示例: I usually find different apps through the App Store on my phone, which offers a wide variety of options including educational, gaming, and social media apps.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is somewhat repetitive. Try to be more precise and use linking words to explain why you want to use educational apps in the future. Avoid repeating 'in my study' multiple times.

示例: In the future, I would like to use educational apps because they can help me improve my studies and learn more effectively.

× On daily basis, I usually use a social media app such as Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp to stay connected with my friends and family.

✓ On a daily basis, I usually use social media apps such as Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp to stay connected with my friends and family.

The phrase 'On daily basis' is missing the article 'a' and 'a social media app' is incorrect when listing multiple apps; it should be plural 'social media apps' because multiple apps are mentioned. The quantifier 'a' is needed before 'daily basis' to make the phrase correct.

× Additionally, I play a video games app for entertainment.

✓ Additionally, I play video games apps for entertainment.

The phrase 'a video games app' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'Video games' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed and 'app' should be pluralized to 'apps' to match the plural noun.

× In the Instagram there are rain checks and they provide a wide variety of entertainment and they give me a daily basis.

✓ On Instagram, there are rain checks, and it provides a wide variety of entertainment and gives me content on a daily basis.

The definite article 'the' before 'Instagram' is incorrect because Instagram is a proper noun and does not require 'the'. Also, 'they' should be 'it' referring to Instagram as a singular app. The phrase 'give me a daily basis' is incorrect; it should be 'gives me content on a daily basis' to make sense.

× I find different apps through App Store in on my phone day.

✓ I find different apps through the App Store on my phone every day.

The prepositions 'in on' are incorrect and redundant; only 'on' is needed. Also, 'App Store' requires the definite article 'the'. The word 'day' should be 'every day' to indicate frequency.

× They offer a wide variety of apps such as education, gaming and social medias.

✓ They offer a wide variety of apps such as education, gaming, and social media.

The term 'social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, commas are needed to separate items in the list.

× In the future, I would like to use apps such as education because in the future it help me to accurate on my study and help me more and more in my study.

✓ In the future, I would like to use educational apps because they will help me improve my studies and assist me more and more.

The phrase 'apps such as education' is incorrect; 'educational apps' is the correct term. Also, 'it help me to accurate on my study' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'they will help me improve my studies'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.