应用程序— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words for reasons, correct verb forms and choose more precise vocabulary. Limit to 2–4 sentences: name the apps, state the main purpose of each and give a brief example. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and 'umm'.

示例: I mainly use WhatsApp and Instagram. I use WhatsApp to text friends and keep in touch with family, especially for organising plans and sharing photos. Instagram I use to follow news and trends because many outlets and creators post short updates there.

建议: Open with a topic sentence stating the types of apps you prefer, then give two specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar (use present tense, 'often' not 'oftenly') and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I usually prefer communication and entertainment apps. For example, I use WhatsApp to stay in touch with family, and I watch TikTok for short videos when I want to relax. These apps help me organise daily life and unwind in my free time.

建议: Use a clear present-tense topic sentence and link reasons logically. Improve grammar (use 'find out' -> 'discover', 'advertisements', 'sometimes', correct tenses). Give one or two specific examples of where you see ads and one brief result. Keep answers concise and natural.

示例: I usually discover new apps through advertisements on social media or while playing mobile games. For instance, I often see promoted videos on Instagram that explain an app's features, and if it looks useful I install it to try it out.

建议: Begin with a clear statement about future intentions, use correct vocabulary ('not a Twitter user' rather than 'tutor user'), and explain briefly why you want to try that app. Add one specific feature you are interested in. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I'm not a Twitter user at the moment, but I would like to use it in the future because it provides real-time news and discussions. I'm particularly interested in following experts and staying updated on current events through short posts.

× Uh, mostly I used WhatsApp and Instagram on the daily basis because umm I use WhatsApp for texting my friends and connected with my family members.

✓ Uh, mostly I use WhatsApp and Instagram on a daily basis because I use WhatsApp to text my friends and stay connected with my family members.

The student mixes past ('used') and present ('I use') forms; the question asks about apps recently used so present perfect or present simple is appropriate. Also 'on the daily basis' is incorrect collocation; use 'on a daily basis'. 'Texting' as a gerund is fine but 'to text' is clearer here. 'Connected with my family members' lacks the correct verb form; use 'stay connected' or 'am connected'. Suggest using consistent present tense and correct collocations.

× On the other side, Instagram gives me about the information of world.

✓ On the other hand, Instagram gives me information about the world.

The phrase 'on the other side' is unnatural here; use 'on the other hand'. 'Gives me about the information of world' has incorrect word order and preposition use; correct order is 'gives me information about the world'. Remove unnecessary articles. Use natural collocations 'information about'.

× I used different apps according to my need like I use WhatsApp for connecting with my family members and Tiktok I use oftenly when I am free and I want to spend my recreational time and quality time.

✓ I use different apps depending on my needs. For example, I use WhatsApp to connect with my family members, and I often use TikTok when I am free to spend my leisure time.

The student again mixes past ('used') and present; use present simple to describe habitual actions. 'According to my need' is awkward; use 'depending on my needs'. 'Connecting with' should be 'to connect with' for purpose. 'Oftenly' is not a word; use 'often'. 'Recreational time and quality time' is redundant; 'leisure time' is more natural. Ensure consistent tense and correct adverb forms.

× Mostly I found out apps through the advertisement, like when I am using my phone or playing game or scrolling social media.

✓ Mostly I find apps through advertisements, for example when I am using my phone, playing games, or scrolling social media.

The student uses past 'found out' but context suggests habitual present; use 'find'. 'Through the advertisement' should be plural 'through advertisements' or 'through an advertisement'. Also 'playing game' needs plural 'games'. Add commas for clarity and use parallel gerunds 'using', 'playing', 'scrolling'.

× Sometime advertisement shows the different apps and their uses and I've installed when I found it interested.

✓ Sometimes advertisements show different apps and their uses, and I install them when I find them interesting.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' in this context. 'I've installed' (present perfect) conflicts with rest; use present simple 'I install'. Pronouns are incorrect: 'I've installed when I found it interested' is ungrammatical; use 'I install them when I find them interesting' matching plural 'apps'. Use consistent tense and correct pronoun reference.

× I am not a tutor user right now, but in future I want to use it and I am interested to know about their features and significance.

✓ I am not a Twitter user right now, but in the future I want to use it, and I am interested in learning about its features and benefits.

The student likely meant 'Twitter' not 'tutor'. 'In future' needs 'in the future'. 'Use it' refers to Twitter (singular), so pronoun 'its' must be singular, not 'their'. 'Interested to know about' is uncommon; use 'interested in learning about'. 'Significance' is awkward here; 'benefits' or 'features' is clearer. Ensure correct noun, articles, and pronoun agreement.

× Tiktok I use oftenly when I am free and I want to spend my recreational time and quality time.

✓ I often use TikTok when I am free and want to spend my leisure time.

Placement of 'often' should be before the verb 'use' for natural adverb position. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; use 'often'. 'Recreational time and quality time' is redundant; 'leisure time' suffices. Also streamline sentence to avoid repetition of 'I'. Use correct adverb placement and gerund forms.

× Instagram gives me about the information of world.

✓ Instagram gives me information about the world.

While 'gives' is correct third-person singular, the rest of the sentence had word order and preposition errors; see earlier correction. Ensure correct noun phrase order: 'information about the world'.

× On the other side, Instagram gives me about the information of world.

✓ On the other hand, Instagram gives me information about the world.

The original sentence's structure is awkward: 'gives me about the information of world' mixes preposition and noun order incorrectly. Reordering and using the idiomatic connector 'on the other hand' fixes structure. Ensure proper preposition placement and article use.

× I am not a tutor user right now, but in future I want to use it and I am interested to know about their features and significance.

✓ I am not a Twitter user right now, but in the future I want to use it, and I am interested in learning about its features and benefits.

'In future' needs the definite article 'the' -> 'in the future'. Also 'a tutor user' is incorrect; likely 'a Twitter user'. Use correct articles with time phrases and accurate nouns.