聚会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'The cause at that time', say 'because'. Also, try to combine sentences to avoid short choppy statements.

示例: Yes, I love parties because they allow me to relax and enjoy time with my friends without any tension. Moreover, I enjoy dancing to music and sharing pizzas with them, which makes the experience more fun.

建议: Your answer needs better structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, be more specific and clear about the frequency. For example, instead of 'I used to go on my friends birthday parties', say 'I used to attend my friends' birthday parties frequently'.

示例: When I was a child, I used to attend many of my friends' birthday parties, usually around 15 to 20. I enjoyed eating chips and drinking soft drinks with them during these celebrations.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Avoid short fragmented sentences and try to combine ideas for fluency. Also, use past simple consistently for past events.

示例: Yes, I organized a surprise party for my best friend's birthday. I decorated her house without telling her and prepared cakes, pizzas, soft drinks, and a gift. She was very happy with the surprise.

× I love to dance on music with them and having pizzas with them.

✓ I love to dance to music with them and have pizzas with them.

The verb 'love' is followed by the infinitive form 'to dance', so 'having' should be changed to the base form 'have' to maintain parallel structure. Also, the correct preposition with 'dance' is 'to' not 'on'.

× I love to dance on music with them and having pizzas with them.

✓ I love to dance to music with them and have pizzas with them.

The correct preposition to use with 'dance' is 'to' rather than 'on'. 'Dance to music' is the standard phrase in English.

× In my childhood I used to go on my friends birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties in my childhood becauses I had that much friend and I enjoy chips and soft drinks with them.

✓ In my childhood, I used to go to my friends' birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties because I had that many friends and I enjoyed chips and soft drinks with them.

The preposition 'go on' is incorrect; it should be 'go to' for events. 'Friends' birthday parties' needs an apostrophe to show possession. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'That much friend' should be 'that many friends' because 'friends' is countable. 'Enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context.

× In my childhood I used to go on my friends birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties in my childhood becauses I had that much friend and I enjoy chips and soft drinks with them.

✓ In my childhood, I used to go to my friends' birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties because I had that many friends and I enjoyed chips and soft drinks with them.

The preposition 'go on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to' when referring to attending events.

× In my childhood I used to go on my friends birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties in my childhood becauses I had that much friend and I enjoy chips and soft drinks with them.

✓ In my childhood, I used to go to my friends' birthday parties and usually I visited 15 to 20 parties because I had that many friends and I enjoyed chips and soft drinks with them.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' because it refers to multiple people. Also, 'that much' is used for uncountable nouns; for countable nouns like 'friends', 'that many' is correct.

× And I have given a surprise to her on her birthday party.

✓ And I gave a surprise to her on her birthday party.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the simple past tense 'gave' is appropriate instead of the present perfect 'have given'.

× And gift for her.

✓ I also gave a gift to her.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb. Adding 'I also gave a gift to her' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.