交通— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary errors (use “crosswalks” not “courseworks”; “people” or “pedestrians” instead of “individual”; “cause” instead of “can be cause”; “aware of” instead of “aware above”). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

示例: Yes, there are many crosswalks near my home. For example, the main road and the school entrance both have well-marked crosswalks with lights. Because of these crosswalks, pedestrians feel safer and drivers slow down, which reduces accidents.

建议: Make your response more organized and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct statement of what you would change, then explain why with a specific consequence. Use appropriate vocabulary: “drive without a license,” “unlicensed drivers,” “cause traffic jams” or “increase accidents.” Use linking words (for example, therefore, because) to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

示例: I would like to reduce the number of unlicensed drivers in my area. Unlicensed drivers often disobey traffic rules and drive unpredictably, which increases the risk of accidents and causes traffic jams. Therefore, stricter enforcement of licensing and regular checkpoints would improve safety.

× It is really important for individual like without a coursework it can be cause of dangerous accident.

✓ It is really important for individuals, because without proper roadworks it can cause dangerous accidents.

The sentence uses singular 'individual' where plural 'individuals' is needed to refer generally; 'a coursework' is incorrect — 'coursework' is uncountable and irrelevant here, likely intended 'roadworks' or 'road markings' (plural). Also 'can be cause of' is incorrect structure; use 'can cause'. Use plural 'accidents' to match general statement. Suggestions: use 'individuals' for general people, replace 'a coursework' with 'proper roadworks' or 'traffic infrastructure', and say 'can cause dangerous accidents'.

× So in our local authorities, they are very aware above among public security.

✓ So our local authorities are very aware of public safety.

The phrase 'aware above among public security' misuses prepositions and word choice. Use 'aware of' to show awareness, and 'public safety' is the correct collocation instead of 'public security'. Also remove unnecessary 'in' before 'our local authorities'. Suggestion: say 'our local authorities are very aware of public safety'.

× As a result, they frequently do courseworks for individual.

✓ As a result, they frequently carry out roadworks for individuals.

'Do courseworks' is incorrect: 'coursework' is an academic term and uncountable; 'roadworks' or 'maintenance' fits the context. 'For individual' should be plural 'for individuals'. Use a verb like 'carry out' for actions by authorities. Suggestion: use 'carry out roadworks for individuals' or 'perform maintenance for the public'.

× In my area, there are a number of vehicles run without license.

✓ In my area, a number of vehicles run without licenses.

Collocation: 'a number of' is correct but must be followed by plural noun 'vehicles'. 'Run without license' needs plural 'licenses' or better 'without a license' for each vehicle; here 'without licenses' matches plural subject. Alternatively, say 'vehicles that are driven without licenses' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a number of vehicles run without licenses' or 'several vehicles are driven without licenses'.

× So if I have opportunity to change these things then it is really efficient for our society.

✓ So if I had the opportunity to change these things, it would be really beneficial for our society.

The sentence mixes conditional forms incorrectly. Use the second conditional for hypothetical situations: 'If I had the opportunity... it would be...' Also 'efficient for our society' is awkward; 'beneficial' or 'helpful' is better. Include the article 'the' before 'opportunity'. Suggestion: use 'If I had the opportunity... it would be beneficial'.

× Like without restriction.

✓ For example, with no restrictions.

'Like without restriction' is a fragment and uses 'like' informally; better to use 'for example' or 'such as' and 'with no restrictions' to express lack of regulation. Also ensure it connects to the previous sentence rather than standing alone. Suggestion: combine into previous sentence: '...for example, with no restrictions.'

× If a number of cars or other vehicles run on the road, it can because of traffic jam.

✓ If a large number of cars and other vehicles are on the road, it can cause a traffic jam.

The original has incorrect clause order and missing verb 'cause' and incorrect article. Use 'a large number of' for emphasis, 'are on the road' or 'use the road' for correct verb form, and 'can cause a traffic jam' as correct result clause. Suggestion: 'If many cars and other vehicles are on the road, it can cause a traffic jam.'