购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar, such as 'I love shopping' instead of 'I love to do shopping'. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea multiple times.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. Recently, I bought a MacBook from a friend's store. Although it was quite expensive, I find shopping to be a fun and rewarding experience.

建议: Focus on clearer sentence construction and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain your reasoning more clearly and avoid awkward phrasing like 'lessen that'.

示例: I'm not very skilled at bargaining, but if a shopkeeper quotes a high price, I try to negotiate it down. This helps me save money, which I can then spend on other personal needs.

建议: Work on sentence fluency and clarity. Avoid fragmented sentences and provide a complete answer. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your experience.

示例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices when shopping because there are so many options. For instance, last Sunday, I was buying a dress for my sister Mary and felt confused because the shopkeeper showed me many different dresses.

建议: Improve sentence structure and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide a full example to support your answer.

示例: Yes, I believe expensive products are usually better because cheaper items often don't last as long. When we invest more money, we often get a warranty and better quality, which means the product can be used for a longer time. For example, I once bought an expensive phone that lasted several years without any issues.

× I love to buy knew things.

✓ I love to buy new things.

The word 'knew' is the past tense of 'know' and is incorrectly used here. The correct adjective is 'new' to describe things that are not old.

× Recently I bought a Mac book from my friends shop that was very expensive but I do love to do shopping.

✓ Recently I bought a MacBook from my friend's shop; it was very expensive but I do love shopping.

The phrase 'friends shop' lacks the possessive apostrophe; it should be 'friend's shop'. Also, 'do love to do shopping' is awkward; 'love shopping' is more natural.

× but whenever shopkeeper tell me the price is higher, I used to lessen that.

✓ but whenever the shopkeeper tells me the price is high, I try to lower it.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'shopkeeper'. Also, subject-verb agreement requires 'tells' for third person singular. 'Used to lessen that' is incorrect; 'try to lower it' is appropriate here.

× I can save my money later on, I can use it on a for my personal use.

✓ I can save my money and later use it for my personal use.

The phrase 'use it on a for my personal use' is incorrect and unclear. The correct preposition is 'for' and the phrase should be simplified for clarity.

× As we all know that. We do have the plenty of options of shopping so for me.

✓ As we all know, we have plenty of shopping options, so for me,

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'The plenty of options' is incorrect; 'plenty of options' is correct. The sentence should be combined for clarity.

× when I was buying a dress for my sisters Mary's, at that time I was very confused 'cause the shopkeeper was showing me numerous presses.

✓ when I was buying a dress for my sister Mary, I was very confused because the shopkeeper was showing me numerous dresses.

'Sisters Mary's' is incorrect; it should be 'my sister Mary'. 'Presses' is a wrong word here; the correct word is 'dresses'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech.

× So for me that was.

✓ So for me, that was difficult.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a predicate. Adding 'difficult' completes the thought.

× Because the cheaper things. I think doesn't work as long as we want to, but we spent lots of money on one thing.

✓ Because cheaper things, I think, don't last as long as we want them to, but if we spend lots of money on one thing,

The sentence is fragmented and has pronoun errors. 'The cheaper things' should be 'cheaper things'. 'Doesn't work' should be 'don't last'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× It would be great for us because it comes with the warranty and we can use it for long term.

✓ It would be great for us because it comes with a warranty and we can use it for the long term.

'The warranty' should be 'a warranty' unless a specific warranty is known. 'For long term' needs the definite article 'the' to be correct.