购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and directly address the question. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or example using linking words.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping, especially online. It is very convenient for me because I have a busy schedule and cannot visit stores in person.

建议: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and explain your reasons clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific details.

示例: Yes, I often compare prices to understand the usual cost range. This helps me save money and make better purchasing decisions.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on giving a clear, direct response with supporting details. Use linking words to explain your reasoning logically.

示例: No, I don't find it difficult to make choices when I shop because I can decide quickly. I know what I want, so I handle the situation easily.

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. It depends on the item, and sometimes expensive products do not meet my expectations.

× I am really loving to shop and actually online shopping, which is so convenient and helpful for me because I don't have any time to go around and work through the street and. Shopping malls.

✓ I really love to shop, and actually online shopping is so convenient and helpful for me because I don't have any time to go around and work through the streets and shopping malls.

The verb 'love' is a stative verb and is not usually used in the continuous form 'am loving'. Instead, the simple present 'love' is appropriate here. Also, 'online shopping' needs a verb to connect it properly in the sentence, so 'is' is added.

× Sometimes I. Compare prices to be sure about the. Range of cost of normal which is important to be convenient and. Actually save money.

✓ Sometimes I compare prices to be sure about the normal range of costs, which is important to be convenient and actually save money.

The original sentence has unnecessary periods breaking the sentence and awkward phrasing. Removing the periods and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't think so because I can get indecision and so fast and it is not necessary about shopping or something else.

✓ I don't think so because I can make decisions very quickly, and it is not only about shopping but also other things.

The phrase 'I can get indecision and so fast' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I can make decisions very quickly'. Also, 'it is not necessary about shopping or something else' is unclear and is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I can handle the situation and why what I want.

✓ I can handle the situation and know what I want.

The phrase 'and why what I want' is incorrect. It should be 'and know what I want' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× Not always, but I think it depends on the product and goods that we want to buy and. It is a fairpoint because I have a problem every single time about it and I think when it is. Expensive. It's bad.

✓ Not always, but I think it depends on the product and goods that we want to buy. It is a fair point because I have a problem with it every single time, and I think when it is expensive, it's bad.

The original sentence has incorrect punctuation and conjunction usage, making it fragmented and unclear. Correcting punctuation and conjunctions improves sentence flow and clarity. Also, 'fairpoint' is corrected to 'fair point'.