购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and try to limit your response to 3-4 sentences. Also, use plural forms correctly (e.g., 'accessories' instead of 'accessory').

示例: Yes, I enjoy shopping a lot. I like buying different items such as ties, clothes, and accessories because it helps me relax and express my personal style.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and includes unnecessary personal details that do not directly answer the question. Try to focus on the main point and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid repeating words and be careful with grammar.

示例: Yes, I always compare prices because I have a limited budget. Therefore, I try to find the best deals to save money when I shop.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid filler words like 'Suddenly' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, it is often difficult for me to make choices because shopping malls offer many varieties. As a result, I find it hard to decide which brand or quality is best.

建议: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct adverbs like 'often' instead of 'oftenly' and improve sentence flow with linking words.

示例: In my opinion, expensive products are often better than cheaper ones because they usually have higher quality and last longer. However, some affordable products can also be good if you choose carefully.

× I'm a shopaholic person so I'm very fond of purchasing different types of things such as a tie or clothes and accessory, which help me to feel relaxed and express my personal styles.

✓ I'm a shopaholic person so I'm very fond of purchasing different types of things such as ties, clothes, and accessories, which help me to feel relaxed and express my personal style.

The sentence incorrectly uses singular forms 'a tie' and 'accessory' when referring to multiple items, so they should be pluralized to 'ties' and 'accessories'. Also, 'personal styles' should be singular 'personal style' because it refers to the individual's unique style. Using correct singular and plural forms improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Definitely, I'm also a girl and I also do bargaining because my father is very poor and and I'm not a working woman so I have very less money to shop for shopping so I'll definitely compare the prices when I shop.

✓ Definitely, I'm also a girl and I do bargaining because my father is very poor and I'm not a working woman, so I have very little money to shop; therefore, I'll definitely compare prices when I shop.

The sentence has repeated 'and and' which is a typographical error. Also, 'very less money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'very little money' when referring to uncountable nouns like money. The sentence structure is improved by replacing 'so' with a semicolon and 'therefore' to better connect ideas. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Suddenly it is a really difficult task for me to choose the things when I shop because when I go to shopping mall for shopping there is there are a lot of varieties for purchasing.

✓ Suddenly, it is really a difficult task for me to choose things when I shop because when I go to the shopping mall, there are a lot of varieties to choose from.

The phrase 'there is there are' is redundant; only 'there are' is needed for plural 'varieties'. Also, 'a lot of varieties for purchasing' is awkward; 'varieties to choose from' is more natural. Adding 'the' before 'shopping mall' is necessary as it refers to a specific place. These corrections fix redundancy, article usage, and improve sentence flow.

× So I find difficulty to find or choose the brand and quality of the product.

✓ So I find it difficult to find or choose the brand and quality of the product.

The phrase 'find difficulty to find' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'find it difficult to find'. This is a common collocation in English. Adding 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× According to me, expensive products are oftenly better than cheaper ones because that is very high quality and last longer products.

✓ According to me, expensive products are often better than cheaper ones because they are very high quality and last longer.

'Oftenly' is not a correct adverb form; the correct adverb is 'often'. Also, 'that is very high quality and last longer products' is ungrammatical; it should be 'they are very high quality and last longer' to agree in number and form. These corrections fix adverb usage and subject-verb agreement.