购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and awkward phrases. For example, instead of saying "I really like the shopping" say "I really enjoy shopping." Also, avoid unclear phrases like "discount song" and focus on clear expressions. Keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. In my free time, I usually browse the Amazon app to check out Prime Day deals. This helps me find good discounts on items I want. I prefer shopping during sales because it saves me money.

建议: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then explain your reasons using linking words like "because" or "so." Avoid filler words like "uh" and incomplete phrases. Also, be specific about the platforms or methods you use to compare prices.

示例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to save money. Nowadays, there are many online shopping platforms available, so I check different websites before making a purchase. This way, I can find the best deal and avoid overspending.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. For example, say "AirPods" instead of "Airports." Use linking words like "because" to explain why it was difficult. Also, avoid repeating words like "long" unnecessarily.

示例: Not usually, but sometimes it is difficult. For example, last month I wanted to buy AirPods, but both models had similar features. Because of this, I spent a lot of time researching before making my decision.

建议: Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "however" or "but" properly to contrast ideas. Also, be specific about your example and explain why the expensive product did not meet your expectations.

示例: Not always. Sometimes cheaper products perform just as well. For example, I bought AirPods Pro for about $285, but they were damaged after only four years of use. This shows that expensive doesn't always mean better quality.

× Yes, I really like the shopping.

✓ Yes, I really like shopping.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before the uncountable noun 'shopping'. In English, we do not use 'the' before uncountable nouns when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× In my free time, I usually browse the Amazon mobile application in order to see the Prime deals going on the specific dates so I can get or do the shopping in a discount song.

✓ In my free time, I usually browse the Amazon mobile application to see the Prime deals going on specific dates so I can get shopping at a discount sale.

The preposition 'on' before 'the specific dates' is incorrect; it should be 'on specific dates' without 'the' because the dates are not previously specified. Also, 'in a discount song' is incorrect; it should be 'at a discount sale' to correctly express shopping during a sale event.

× And in today's world, umm, we have the accessibility and availability to various kind of shopping platforms.

✓ And in today's world, umm, we have accessibility and availability of various kinds of shopping platforms.

The phrase 'accessibility and availability to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'of'. Also, 'various kind' should be pluralized to 'various kinds' to agree with the plural noun 'platforms'.

× So when I do online shopping, yeah, it's kind of a common tendency to check the other shopping platform and whoever, uh.

✓ So when I do online shopping, yeah, it's kind of a common tendency to check other shopping platforms and whoever, uh.

The phrase 'the other shopping platform' is incorrect because 'other' implies plural here; it should be 'other shopping platforms' to match the plural sense. Also, 'the' is unnecessary before 'other' in this context.

× For example last month I was trying to purchase an Airports, but the problem is like the similar features were present in both models.

✓ For example, last month I was trying to purchase AirPods, but the problem was that similar features were present in both models.

The word 'Airports' is incorrect; the correct product name is 'AirPods' which is plural. Also, 'the similar features' should be 'similar features' without 'the' because it refers to features in general. Additionally, 'is like' is informal and should be replaced with 'was that' for clarity.

× So I took so long to give a long research before buying that.

✓ So I took a long time to do thorough research before buying it.

The phrase 'give a long research' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'do thorough research'. Also, 'that' should be replaced with 'it' to refer to the item being purchased. 'Took so long' is better expressed as 'took a long time'.

× For example I was using my Airpods Pro, it's very costly, it's around like $285 when I bought the item but it got damaged after my usage of the four year but.

✓ For example, I was using my AirPods Pro; it's very costly, around $285 when I bought it, but it got damaged after four years of use.

The pronoun 'it' is used inconsistently; 'the item' should be replaced with 'it' for clarity and conciseness. 'My usage of the four year' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'after four years of use'. Also, 'Airpods' should be capitalized as 'AirPods'.