购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is enthusiastic but a bit unclear and slightly redundant. Try to be more precise and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'Thank you'. Also, clarify what you mean by 'renew all my hobbies' to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. Every weekend, I go shopping with my friends or family to buy new items related to my hobbies, like books or sports equipment.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid unclear phrases and focus on explaining why you compare prices in different stores.

示例: It depends on the store. For luxury brands like Louis Vuitton, I always compare prices because they are very expensive. However, for standard brands like Adidas, the prices are usually fixed, so I don't compare as much.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: It depends on the store. For luxury brands like Louis Vuitton, it is difficult to decide because the prices are very high, so I have to think carefully before buying.

建议: Your answer is contradictory and unclear. Make sure to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid repeating phrases and organize your answer logically using linking words.

示例: I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. Sometimes, cheaper products suit my style better or have good quality, so it depends on personal preference and the product type.

× I always, every weekend I go shopping with my friends, with my family, 'cause I need to renew all my hobbies.

✓ I always, every weekend I go shopping with my friends and my family, because I need to renew all my hobbies.

The phrase 'with my friends, with my family' is awkward and redundant. Using 'and' is more appropriate to connect the two groups. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is better in this context.

× If I go to a luxury brand like Louis Vuitton, yes, the prices for the luxury brands it's so high 'cause it's no one who's or the brands when I go to any like Adidas like send any standard price.

✓ If I go to a luxury brand like Louis Vuitton, yes, the prices for luxury brands are so high because no one owns the brands. When I go to brands like Adidas, they have standard prices.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and incorrect structure. 'It's no one who's or the brands' is confusing and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun and verb agreement.

× To be honest, it goes on the types of the store for luxury brands like Louis Vuitton, I usually think, what if I want to buy it 'cause it's a it's a high, it's a high price.

✓ To be honest, it depends on the type of store. For luxury brands like Louis Vuitton, I usually think carefully before buying because it has a high price.

The phrase 'it goes on the types of the store' is incorrect; 'it depends on the type of store' is correct. Also, 'it's a it's a high, it's a high price' is repetitive and ungrammatical. The correction improves clarity and grammar.

× The expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. You might like the cheaper ones more than the expensive products. So it goes. Or it based on your type or your style.

✓ Expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. You might like the cheaper ones more than the expensive products. It depends on your taste or style.

The original sentences have incorrect conjunctions and unclear phrases like 'So it goes' and 'Or it based on your type or your style.' The correction uses proper conjunctions and clearer expressions.