购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复和冗余。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅。

示例: I don't particularly enjoy shopping because I prefer to spend my time with my family and work. However, sometimes I buy things that I really like.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法错误较多，句子不够连贯。建议注意时态和词形变化，使用连接词使句子更自然。

示例: Yes, I always compare prices because I usually shop online. It's convenient to visit different websites, and it only takes a few minutes to find lower prices, so I prefer to compare before buying.

建议: 回答内容混乱，句子结构不完整且表达不清。建议简化表达，直接回答问题，并用连词连接句子，使逻辑清晰。

示例: It's not difficult for me to make choices because I usually know what I want. I just search for the item, compare prices, and then make a purchase.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但用词和句式较简单，且有语法错误。建议使用更准确的词汇和完整句子表达观点。

示例: I don't think expensive products are always better because some items are overpriced just for selling. Therefore, price doesn't always reflect quality.

× I'm not particularly fond of shopping because I'm rather put my time on the other aspect of such as my family, my daughters, my work.

✓ I'm not particularly fond of shopping because I rather put my time on other aspects such as my family, my daughters, my work.

这里的错误是动词后不应该接动名词形式。'I'm rather put'是不正确的表达，应该用'I rather put'，因为'rather'后面直接接动词原形。建议去掉'I'm'，改为'I rather put'。

× I'm not particularly fond of shopping because I'm rather put my time on the other aspect of such as my family, my daughters, my work.

✓ I'm not particularly fond of shopping because I rather put my time into other aspects such as my family, my daughters, my work.

动词'put'后面应该用介词'into'表示投入时间，而不是'on'。另外，'the other aspect'应改为复数形式'other aspects'，因为后面列举了多个方面。

× I think shopping is quite wasting of time, but sometimes if I buy some I like something that I like, I will be.

✓ I think shopping is quite a waste of time, but sometimes if I buy something that I like, I will be happy.

'wasting of time'用法不正确，应该用名词短语'a waste of time'。句子结构混乱，'if I buy some I like something that I like'重复且不完整，改为'if I buy something that I like'更通顺。最后的'I will be'缺少表语，补充为'I will be happy'。

× Because I mostly shopping online, the comparing of price is quite convenient to visit different websites that may cost me only few minutes to to get a lower prices.

✓ Because I mostly shop online, comparing prices is quite convenient; I can visit different websites that may cost me only a few minutes to get lower prices.

'mostly shopping'应改为动词原形'shop'。'the comparing of price'应改为'comparing prices'，去掉定冠词且用复数。'to to get'重复，应去掉一个'to'。'a few minutes'前应加不定冠词'a'。'a lower prices'中'prices'复数，前面不应加'a'。

× So I prefer compare the price before buying.

✓ So I prefer to compare the prices before buying.

'prefer'后面接动词时应加不定式'to compare'。'the price'应改为复数'the prices'，因为比较多个价格。

× It's not hard for me to make choice when I shop because usually I'm targeting on something that I when I want to buy something, I don't think I just need to type the keywords like the things I need to buy and then compare the price and then pay all night.

✓ It's not hard for me to make choices when I shop because usually I'm targeting something. When I want to buy something, I just need to type the keywords of the things I need to buy, then compare the prices and then pay online.

'make choice'应为复数'make choices'。'targeting on'应改为'targeting'，动词'target'后不接介词'on'。句子结构混乱，分成两句更清晰。'pay all night'应为'pay online'，推测为打字错误。

× It's not hard for me to make choice when I shop because usually I'm targeting on something that I when I want to buy something, I don't think I just need to type the keywords like the things I need to buy and then compare the price and then pay all night.

✓ It's not hard for me to make choices when I shop because usually I'm targeting something. When I want to buy something, I just need to type the keywords of the things I need to buy, then compare the prices and then pay online.

'like the things'应改为'of the things'，表示关键词是关于需要买的东西。

× I mostly shopping online, the comparing of price is quite convenient to visit different websites that may cost me only few minutes to to get a lower prices.

✓ Because I mostly shop online, comparing prices is quite convenient; I can visit different websites that may cost me only a few minutes to get lower prices.

重复，已在前面解释。

× I don't think so because some of the products may mark up for selling, so some expensive products may be just marked up already.

✓ I don't think so because some of the products may be marked up for selling, so some expensive products may just be marked up already.

'may mark up'应为被动语态'may be marked up'，表示产品被加价。语序调整使句子更通顺。