购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: คุณควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำให้ถูกต้อง เช่น ใช้ 'I shop online often' แทน 'I shopping online often' และใช้คำที่เหมาะสมแทน 'bounce over my phone' เช่น 'browse on my phone' เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และควรหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำและเพิ่มความชัดเจนในประโยค

示例: Yes, I like shopping, but I often shop online because it's very convenient. I can easily browse on my phone to find anything I want and compare prices.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้อง เช่น ใช้ 'I usually compare prices with other shops' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อนหรือไม่ชัดเจน เช่น 'many shops are many shop' ควรใช้คำที่ชัดเจนและเหมาะสมเพื่อให้คำตอบสมบูรณ์และเข้าใจง่าย

示例: Yes, when I shop, I usually compare prices with other shops. Shopping online makes it easy because there are many shops available to compare.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ 'There are many different shops online, so it can be difficult to choose.' และหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่เป็นทางการหรือไม่ชัดเจน เช่น 'uh' และควรใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์เพื่อสื่อความหมายได้ชัดเจน

示例: Yes, it is difficult because there are many different shops online, which gives me a lot of choices. Therefore, I spend a lot of time comparing products before making a decision.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น ใช้ 'brands' แทน 'band' และปรับประโยคให้สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'I think high-end or luxury brands are usually better than cheaper ones, but sometimes cheaper products have the same quality materials as expensive ones.' เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

示例: Not always. I think high-end or luxury brands are usually better than cheaper ones, but sometimes cheaper products use the same quality materials as expensive ones.

× Yes, I like shopping, but I shopping online often because it's convenient.

✓ Yes, I like shopping, but I shop online often because it's convenient.

The verb 'shopping' is incorrectly used instead of the base form 'shop' after 'I'. After 'I', the base form of the verb should be used unless it is part of a continuous tense or gerund phrase. Here, 'I shop online often' is correct.

× I can bounce over my phone to find anything I want and can compare the price.

✓ I can browse on my phone to find anything I want and can compare the prices.

The phrase 'bounce over my phone' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'browse' and the preposition 'on' is used with 'phone'. Also, 'price' should be plural 'prices' when comparing multiple items.

× Yes, when I shop I usually compare the price with other shop.

✓ Yes, when I shop I usually compare the prices with other shops.

Both 'price' and 'shop' should be plural because multiple prices and shops are being compared.

× When you shopping online you can compare easily because many shops are many shop.

✓ When you shop online you can compare easily because there are many shops.

'Shopping' is incorrectly used instead of 'shop' after 'you'. Also, the phrase 'many shops are many shop' is incorrect; it should be 'there are many shops'.

× When you shopping online you can compare easily because many shops are many shop.

✓ When you shop online you can compare easily because there are many shops.

The sentence lacks the correct 'there are' structure to indicate existence of multiple shops.

× Hmm, yes, because shopping online it has very different shop, it can very uh choices.

✓ Hmm, yes, because shopping online has many different shops, it can offer many choices.

The sentence structure is incorrect and unclear. 'Shopping online it has very different shop' should be 'shopping online has many different shops'. Also, 'it can very uh choices' is unclear and corrected to 'it can offer many choices'.

× So it's make me find something hard.

✓ So it makes it hard for me to find something.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'It's make me find something hard' should be 'it makes it hard for me to find something'.

× I would like to compare it make me use a lot of time.

✓ I would like to compare, but it makes me spend a lot of time.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be split and corrected to express that comparing takes a lot of time.

× Not always, but most of all I think the high end band or luxury band.

✓ Not always, but mostly I think the high-end brand or luxury brand.

'Band' is incorrect; it should be 'brand'. Also, 'most of all' is better expressed as 'mostly' here.

× They are better than cheaper one, but sometimes a cheaper one material are the same at the expensive one.

✓ They are better than cheaper ones, but sometimes a cheaper one's material is the same as the expensive one's.

'One' should be plural 'ones' when comparing multiple items. Also, possessive form 'cheaper one's' and 'expensive one's' is needed. 'Material are' should be 'material is'. 'At' should be 'as' for comparison.