购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is enthusiastic but needs better grammar and clarity. Use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I love shopping because it is a fun activity for me. Recently, I bought a pair of Jordan shoes, which were quite expensive, costing around 200,000. I usually enjoy shopping with my friends and family. Moreover, my little sister likes to shop with me, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

建议: Your answer is clear but a bit lengthy and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

示例: I usually don't compare prices when I shop because my financial situation is stable. Since my father is a businessman and my mother is a nursing officer, I receive pocket money regularly. Therefore, I don't feel the need to check price tags carefully.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use simpler sentences and correct grammar. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'shopping is grateful for every'. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices when shopping because I often get confused. I usually go to stores or shop online with my little sister, who is very trendy and follows the latest fashions. This helps me decide better. Overall, I enjoy shopping despite the difficulty.

建议: Your answer has grammar errors and some awkward phrasing. Try to use correct comparative forms and clearer sentences. Also, provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion, using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, in my opinion, expensive products are generally better than cheaper ones. This is because expensive items usually have higher quality, whether it's clothing or other goods. Moreover, they tend to last longer, which makes them more valuable in the long run.

× Recently I buy a Jordan shoes which is really costly around 2,00,000 and I love to shop with my friends and family whereas my little sister also like to shop with me.

✓ Recently I bought a pair of Jordan shoes which are really costly, around 2,00,000, and I love to shop with my friends and family whereas my little sister also likes to shop with me.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so it should be preceded by 'a pair of' instead of 'a'. The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to match the recent past action. Also, 'shoes' being plural requires the verb 'are' instead of 'is'. The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'my little sister'.

× I don't compare prices when I shop because my financial condition is very stable and I would say that it's very good because my father is a businessman as well as my mother is a nursing officer.

✓ I don't compare prices when I shop because my financial condition is very stable and I would say that it's very good because my father is a businessman and my mother is a nursing officer.

The phrase 'as well as' is incorrectly used here; 'and' is more appropriate to connect two independent clauses. This is a sentence structure issue related to conjunction use, but since 'Incorrect conjunction use' is ID 16 and not 'Present tense issue', this correction is minimal and focuses on clarity.

× So I got pocket money every month.

✓ So I get pocket money every month.

The verb 'got' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'get' is correct.

× So I don't check tags or price.

✓ So I don't check tags or prices.

Since 'tags' is plural, 'price' should also be plural to maintain parallel structure.

× Yes, it is very difficult to me while shopping because I'm very confused while shop doing shopping, I preferably visit the stores or do online shopping with my little sister as she's a trendy person and follow the trend.

✓ Yes, it is very difficult for me while shopping because I'm very confused during shopping. I usually visit stores or do online shopping with my little sister as she's a trendy person and follows the trend.

The phrase 'difficult to me' should be 'difficult for me'. 'While shop doing shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'during shopping'. 'Preferably' is incorrectly used; 'usually' fits better. Also, 'follow' should be 'follows' to agree with singular subject 'she'. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× Nevertheless, shopping is grateful for every.

✓ Nevertheless, shopping is enjoyable for everyone.

'Grateful' is an adjective describing feelings of gratitude, not suitable here. 'Enjoyable' correctly describes the experience of shopping. 'For every' is incomplete; 'for everyone' is correct.

× Yes, according to my perspective expensive products are much more better than cheaper product.

✓ Yes, according to my perspective, expensive products are much better than cheaper products.

'Much more better' is incorrect; 'much better' is correct. 'Product' should be plural 'products' to match 'expensive products'.

× Whereas expensive products provides a good quality of range ranging from clothing to any object which are higher cost.

✓ Expensive products provide a good quality range, ranging from clothing to any object which is of higher cost.

'Products' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide' not 'provides'. 'Quality of range' is awkward; 'quality range' is better. 'Which are higher cost' should be 'which is of higher cost' because 'object' is singular.

× Higher cost products last for long years.

✓ Higher cost products last for many years.

'Long years' is not a common collocation; 'many years' is the correct phrase to express duration.