购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve fluency and accuracy by reducing hesitations and fixing grammar (e.g., plural/singular, word order). Keep answer concise (max 3–4 sentences) and add one specific detail or example. Use linking words like “because” to connect reasons.

示例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially online, because it’s very convenient. For example, I can compare dozens of items on my phone and pay instantly with a credit card. This saves me time and I don’t need to go out.

建议: Use clearer sentence structure and more precise vocabulary (e.g., “identical items” not “same, same things”). Combine reasons with a linking word and give a brief specific example of how you compare prices.

示例: Yes, I usually compare prices online because identical items can have different prices. For instance, I check two or three websites and choose the cheapest one so I can save money for travel.

建议: Correct grammar (subject–verb agreement) and reduce filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence then give one or two concise reasons with linking words like “because” or “so”. Avoid repeating phrases.

示例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices because I worry about picking the best option. For example, I sometimes take a whole day deciding and often ask a friend for advice to be sure.

建议: Give a direct opinion in one sentence, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., “made by the same manufacturer”, “brand makes it expensive”). Use a linking word like “because” or “however.”

示例: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better because some are made by the same manufacturer as cheaper versions. For example, a branded phone case may cost twice as much but be identical in material to a cheaper non-branded one.

× You can choose, umm, many choice that have been given.

✓ You can choose from many choices that are available.

The verb 'choose' is fine but the noun 'choice' should be plural ('choices') and requires the preposition 'from' to indicate selection. 'That have been given' is awkward; use 'that are available' to describe provided options. Use correct noun form and preposition for natural phrasing.

× And I also can make purchase, uh, via online payment and I think it is uh, really easy and convenient so that I don't need to go out to purchase.

✓ And I can also make purchases via online payment, and I think it is really easy and convenient so I don't need to go out to shop.

Use plural 'purchases' when speaking generally. Place 'also' after the subject for natural word order ('I can also'). 'Go out to purchase' is non-idiomatic; use 'go out to shop'. Remove unnecessary 'so that' and use 'so' to give the result. Ensure consistent verb forms.

× especially in online shopping, they are given uh, same, same things with different prices.

✓ especially when shopping online, the same items are sold at different prices.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear; use 'the same items' for clarity. Use plural 'items' and correct passive construction 'are sold at different prices'. Maintain subject-verb agreement and idiomatic phrasing.

× So I want to umm, save budget and I can use the money for other thing, that's all.

✓ So I want to save money and I can use it for other things, that's all.

'Save budget' is not idiomatic; say 'save money'. 'Other thing' should be plural 'other things' and use pronoun 'it' to refer to 'money'. Quantifiers and references must match number and be idiomatic.

× Yes, I is, I think it's really difficult.

✓ Yes, I am. I think it's really difficult.

The subject 'I' requires the verb 'am', not 'is'. Split into two sentences for clarity: a short affirmation followed by explanation.

× Sometimes I take a day to choose, umm, what the best that I think and yeah, sometimes I also ask my friend to choose uh, which one is the best and that's why I think it's difficult for me, uh, when making choice.

✓ Sometimes I take a day to choose what I think is best, and sometimes I also ask my friend which one is best, so I find it difficult to make choices.

Use the structure 'what I think is best' rather than 'what the best that I think'. 'Ask my friend to choose which one is the best' can be simplified to 'ask my friend which one is best'. Use 'make choices' with plural 'choices'. Maintain parallel structure and natural word order.

× I don't think it's possible. Always better because sometimes umm expensive product is just made umm from same manufacture manufacturer by same manufacturer.

✓ I don't think expensive products are always better because sometimes an expensive product is simply made by the same manufacturer.

Combine the fragments into one sentence and correct word order. Use plural 'products' for general statements and place 'always' before 'better' or rephrase as 'are always better'. Use 'made by the same manufacturer' for correct passive construction. Remove redundant words.

× So umm it is about the brand of the product, sometimes the brand that make it expensive but the quality is still same with the cheap.

✓ So it depends on the product's brand; sometimes the brand makes it expensive, but the quality is still the same as the cheaper one.

Use possessive 'product's brand' or 'the brand of the product'. 'Brand that make' needs subject-verb agreement 'brand makes'. Use comparison 'the same as the cheaper one' for clarity. Include articles where needed ('the cheaper one').