工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且部分词汇使用不当。建议加强语法基础，注意动词形式和词汇搭配，同时使表达更简洁自然。

範例: Currently, I am a student. I have just completed my bachelor's degree and am planning to study for a master's degree abroad. I want to improve myself and understand the world better.

建議: 回答结构混乱，时态使用不准确，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态，简洁明了地描述过去的工作经历。

範例: I am not working now, but two years ago, I had a full-time job in a small town in the United States. I worked at a fishing shop that sold fishing tools and hardware.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意主谓一致和冠词使用。

範例: Yes, the city is called Soldotna, which is in Alaska. Alaska is a very natural state, and our fishing shop is near a National Park where many people go fishing. Therefore, the store is very busy during holidays.

建議: 回答语法错误严重，表达不完整且不连贯。建议练习句子结构，确保主谓一致，并补充具体细节使回答更完整。

範例: Yes, I liked the place where I worked. The store was owned by two brothers who have two daughters. It was a family business with a friendly environment, and they even had a dog. The natural surroundings made it a pleasant place to work.

建議: 回答表达不完整，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议明确表达未来计划，使用恰当的词汇和完整句子。

範例: Honestly, I don't have very specific future work plans yet, but I hope to work in a global organization like the United Nations. I want to connect with people from different countries and help them understand each other better.

× I just finished my bachelor's degree and now I'm thinking of go to a board to study for a master degree.

✓ I just finished my bachelor's degree and now I'm thinking of going abroad to study for a master's degree.

动词短语 'thinking of' 后面应接动名词形式，故 'go' 应改为 'going'。此外，'a board' 应为 'abroad'，表示去国外。'master degree' 前应加所有格 'master's degree'。

× I want to approve myself and to get the world more clearly.

✓ I want to improve myself and understand the world more clearly.

'approve myself' 用词错误，应为 'improve myself' 表示提升自己。'get the world more clearly' 表达不准确，应改为 'understand the world more clearly'。

× Now I don't work, but I have a job like in two years ago, like a full time job.

✓ Now I don't work, but I had a job about two years ago, a full-time job.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时态，'have' 应改为 'had'。'like in two years ago' 表达不准确，应为 'about two years ago'。

× I work in United States and in a fishing shop, like fishing tools and hardware stuff and all the same.

✓ I worked in the United States in a fishing shop that sold fishing tools, hardware, and similar items.

描述过去经历应使用过去时态，'work' 应改为 'worked'。'United States' 前应加定冠词 'the'。句子结构需调整以表达清晰。

× It's like that's a small town.

✓ It's a small town.

句中 'like that's' 多余且不符合语法，应删除，简化为 'It's a small town'。

× You might not heard that, but in Alaska, you know the Alaska is like a very natural state and our fishing shop is close to a National Park, the National Park, a lot of people go fishing in there.

✓ You might not have heard of it, but Alaska is a very natural state, and our fishing shop is close to a National Park where many people go fishing.

'You might not heard' 应为完成时 'You might not have heard'。'heard that' 应为 'heard of it'。重复使用 'the National Park' 不自然，应合并。句子结构需调整以更通顺。

× So that store are very busy in holiday.

✓ So that store is very busy during the holidays.

主语 'store' 是单数，谓语动词应为单数 'is'。'in holiday' 应改为 'during the holidays'。

× Yes, of course the store owner are was two brothers and they have two daughters.

✓ Yes, of course the store owners were two brothers and they have two daughters.

'store owner' 应为复数 'store owners'，谓语动词应与主语一致，过去时用 'were'。

× It's like a family business and the environment are very friendly and they raise a dog like you can imagine, you know natural place and have.

✓ It's a family business, and the environment is very friendly. They have a dog, as you can imagine in such a natural place.

主语 'environment' 是单数，谓语动词应为 'is'。句子结构混乱，需拆分并调整以表达清晰。

× Honestly, I don't have very specific future work plan, but I want to work in like very global system like the United Nations because I want to get in touch like from every every different countries people to get know each other and to.

✓ Honestly, I don't have a very specific future work plan, but I want to work in a very global system like the United Nations because I want to get in touch with people from many different countries to get to know each other.

'work plan' 前应加不定冠词 'a'。'in like very global system' 表达不准确，应为 'in a very global system'。'get in touch like from every every different countries people' 结构混乱，应改为 'get in touch with people from many different countries'。